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Comparison and Contrast – Depression and Hyperhidrosis
Teenage depression is a common problem in today’s society and is often a major factor for numerous teenager problems. Depression is caused by many things, for example, Hyperhidrosis. Hyperhidrosis affects many teenagers which may be a contributing factor to one’s depression. Hyperhidrosis and Depression have been commonly linked together that Hyperhidrosis has been a cause for Depression, but there are ways to fight Depression and treatments to help Hyperhidrosis.
What is Depression? [Writing suggestion: Unless in a quote or a title, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing. A good idea is to provide answers, not questions] Many people view Depression as being [Doctoral rule (but good advice for any academic writer)--If not a noun (as in "human being"), the word "Being" is hard to imagine; it means "existing." Try to rewrite this without using "being"--with action words like "attending," "working," "living," "experiencing," simply "as"--or even removing "being" completely] in a state of sadness. Depression is not only a state of being sad; it is a disease that conquers the ability to feel any emotion, whether good or bad, whatsoever. While Depression may involve the mind, but it also involves the body and thoughts. When in a state of being depressed, we tend to think sadness which may sometimes lead to suicide or other reckless acts. There are three types of depression: Major [A military rank is not capitalized unless it is the first word in a sentence or associated with the name of a person or institution, e.g., Captain John Doe. If not, it is just a label, such as lieutenant, sergeant, colonel, corporal, etc.] depression, Dysthymic depression and bipolar depression. Major Depression is a combination of not being able to function and do everyday activities such as sleep, eat, or study. Dysthemic depression is characterized by a long-term depressed mood but not enough to be characterized as major. The third type of depression is bipolar which is characterized as a disorder that alternates your mood between clinical depression and extreme depression. All three which affect [following "which," the verb needs a conjugation--it should end in "ed" or "s" (if the subject is singular)] all age groups; however, teenagers are the most common to be heard of being affected by the disease.
Hyperhidrosis has been known to be one of the many causes for Depression. Hyperhidrosis, also known as excessive-sweating, is a common disorder that is brought about when the body perspires more than it should. Excessive sweating commonly occurs in the hands, feet, armpits, face and [Grammar: A run-on sentence requires a comma before "and" (or other conjunction) linking main clauses] it may also produce a lot of [Only commercial shipments and real estate are measured in lots. To use "a lot of" to mean "many," "much," or "a large amount" is a colloquialism (not universally clear). Use another term.] unhappiness. For some people, heat and emotion may trigger Hyperhidrosis, while others suffer from the disorder nearly all their walking hours, regardless of their mood or the weather. There are two typed of Hyperhidrosis: primary and secondary. Primary Hyperhidrosis can mean your sweating might not be caused by taking any drugs or any known medical condition that you may have. First signs...
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