* 1.Is my title and introduction enticing?
* My title and introduction is in my opinion enticing. * 2.Is my thesis effective?
* I believe that my thesis statement is very effective. * 3.Have I included enough details so the reader can visualize my experience? * The details included in my essay should give the reader a clear view on my experience. * 4.Are the events presented in a logical sequence?
* The events included in my essay are presented in a logical sequence. * 5.Have I used transitions to help the sequence of events flow smoothly? * I have used transitions to help t sequence of evens flow smoothly. * 6.Have I used dialogue (if appropriate)?
* If dialogue was appropriate it has been used.
* 7.Have I used a consistent point of view and verb tense? * In my essay I have used a consistent point of view and verb tense. * 8.Is the point of my narrative evident?
* The point of my narrative is evident throughout the essay. * 9.Have I ended the story satisfactorily?
* I believe and feel I have ended the story satisfactorily. * 10.Have I proofread thoroughly?
* I have proofread thorough, and also had another proof reader read my narrative througly. (Adapted from Write Now, pp. 110-111)
Military’s Impact On My Life
By Daniel Hamilton
The moment that had the most impact in my life would be when I joined the United States Army. Before the day that I signed up I never in my life pictured that I would be where I am today because of the Military. The day that I left for basic training was the beginning of a whole new life.
I joined the Army July 27th 2009, and at the time I was still under the age of eighteen. I had to have my parents consent, and they were in full support of my choice to enlist. This didn’t come to a big surprise to my parents, because my older brother was already enlisted, serving time in...