example of peer assessment of essay

I have read your essay over and over and found your strength and some things can be improved more from my opinion. I am really happy that I can give you my assessment for your essay and hope it would be helpful to figure out how to enhance writing skills. First of all, I like your summary, but I thought first paragraph is a little long so, your reader will need some break into it. So I guess you can divided by two. I suggest you to split one paragraph into two by summarizing what this issue is about and what Ms. Sandra does to this issue. Overall of your summary, I had a good understanding and could see what is this topic about very well. You have good explanation what she does and what she feels about every single thing happened to her. Secondly, you started your analysis of this speech you chose. What I like about the way you started is how she started this speech by explaining that she gives all of her background to establish credibility with a couple sentences. I think this is a good start because I think your writing is going and proceeding with your reader which means the readers don't get lost during reading your essay. Lastly, I would recommend you to put some your or your friend’s some story or can be observations to compare your values or sense of the compelling issues to speaker’s things. Putting on own experience in real life can be good source to back up your response to this speech as well. I am pretty sure it would be more interesting essay for readers. Other things, you have respectful each analysis of this speech such as logic, how you get persuaded, who she is addressing to so on. I see you follow exactly rhetorical considerations. I hope you do your best on your essay even thought you already have really good quality of it which is impressive. I could learn from your essay too. Good luck.