mid-autumn festival lantern
Chau Tran
Instructor Jordan
English 107
25 september 2013
Mid-Autumn Festival Lantern Mid-Autumn (Moon Festival) is celebrated in Vietnam as a traditional festival in which most of young children take part in, that is why it is also known as Children’s Festival- need to separate into 2 sentences or use difference structure such as:: mid autumn(moon) festival is one of the traditional festival in vietnam and it is also known as children's festival, because … . This is one of the most popular Vietnamese holiday which is celebrated on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month, when the moon is roundest and brightest in the year. Mid-Autumn festival is definitely my favorite day(festival), because I like everything that related to the festival, including moon cakes, lion dances, and This sentence is too long, I would rather break it to 2 sentences :: especially my memories about it. When…. when I was a child, I liked to hold a lantern on my hands with a lighted candle inside walking down the street on the holiday night. Years ago, when I was a child, every kids in my neighborhood, including me were very excited to wait for the festival coming. It was a wonderful occassion -occasion for me to get new toys and clothes, because delete(at the time, )I was (use rarely instead)barely given the new things from my parents. So that, I was euphoric to put on a new clothes, hold a brand new lantern in hands and follow the lion dances parade through the streets with my friends. That's why I was euphoric to put on these new clothes, and hold a brand new lantern …to follow the lion dances…. During the night of the festival, children worn paper masks of their favorite characters such as monkey, lion, princess, etc, and paraded on the streets or around a large ground, sang the songs of the festival, with colorful lanterns in hands (the sentence is too long, and too many conjunctions). There were several different shapes of lanterns including butterflies, fishes, twinkle of
Instructor Jordan
English 107
25 september 2013
Mid-Autumn Festival Lantern Mid-Autumn (Moon Festival) is celebrated in Vietnam as a traditional festival in which most of young children take part in, that is why it is also known as Children’s Festival- need to separate into 2 sentences or use difference structure such as:: mid autumn(moon) festival is one of the traditional festival in vietnam and it is also known as children's festival, because … . This is one of the most popular Vietnamese holiday which is celebrated on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month, when the moon is roundest and brightest in the year. Mid-Autumn festival is definitely my favorite day(festival), because I like everything that related to the festival, including moon cakes, lion dances, and This sentence is too long, I would rather break it to 2 sentences :: especially my memories about it. When…. when I was a child, I liked to hold a lantern on my hands with a lighted candle inside walking down the street on the holiday night. Years ago, when I was a child, every kids in my neighborhood, including me were very excited to wait for the festival coming. It was a wonderful occassion -occasion for me to get new toys and clothes, because delete(at the time, )I was (use rarely instead)barely given the new things from my parents. So that, I was euphoric to put on a new clothes, hold a brand new lantern in hands and follow the lion dances parade through the streets with my friends. That's why I was euphoric to put on these new clothes, and hold a brand new lantern …to follow the lion dances…. During the night of the festival, children worn paper masks of their favorite characters such as monkey, lion, princess, etc, and paraded on the streets or around a large ground, sang the songs of the festival, with colorful lanterns in hands (the sentence is too long, and too many conjunctions). There were several different shapes of lanterns including butterflies, fishes, twinkle of