Letter to a Peer Reviewer

Dear Anna,
In this letter I will be responding to a peer review you made on my personal narrative. I would like to begin by thanking you for reviewing my narrative and assisting me in improving it. You pointed out certain things I overlooked while completing my first draft and made some helpful suggestions. Throughout the letter I will be addressing the concerns and suggestions you made on my peer review. I will be addressing issues concerning the organization and structure, the introduction, thesis, body and overall review of my narrative.
Firstly, I would like to begin by addressing the organization and structure portion of the review. I believe you gave me good constructive feedback on making corrections to my thesis. I agree with your suggestions and believe my thesis could have been stronger. I also believe it needs to be edited. You also suggested that most of the things written in my introduction should have been included in the body of my narrative. I believe most of the things I wrote about in my introduction were included in the body of my narrative which is something I feel you overlooked. For example, in the introduction of my narrative I wrote about what social work meant to me and what inspired me to become a social worker, which was my son. I did mention those things in the body of my narrative however, I do believe need to expand on the details in the body of my narrative.
Secondly, I would like to address your concerns about the introduction of my narrative. You mentioned that my introduction and entire narrative was about family. However, the message I am attempting to convey in the introduction of my narrative is to define what social work means to me. In the introduction I did mention what being a social worker meant to me and how my son was the inspiration for me wanting to become a social worker as the opening part of the introduction. My son is a part of my family and in that aspect it does relate to family but my entire introduction