Foster Literacy Reflection

The essay that I believe could become greatly improved upon with more revision is my research paper, “Who’s Putting the Care in Foster Care.” I think I felt a little under pressure from the daunting shadow of finals that December brings, reflecting on my essay as a mass amount of careless errors. With more time, I could not only more thoroughly proofread my essay, as I should have done previously, but also expand certain lacking areas of my essay. These lacking areas target my introduction and conclusion. The beginning and closing of an essay has always been a struggle for me, however, for some reason it was exceptionally more difficult for me on my research paper. In addition, a key point for improvement is in what was facading as a hook, “All children are deserving of growing up in a safe and nurturing home, but as we all know, this is not the reality of what happens.” This is
A struggle for me in my writing is properly incorporating outside sources. This is most obvious in my Study Sync assignment on being transgender, where I did not quote any of the sources I read, or cite the ones that I was referring to. But by our last assignment, the research paper, I had become much more skilled in incorporating expert sources in my writing as well as analyzing them to further my points. Our first assignment, What’s in a Name, honestly makes me cringe. I think I was being a try-hard with much of my wording. I used the phrase “black noir sky,” but noir is black. I basically just said the blackety black black sky. Thankfully this issue improved much over the course of the year. Also, while writing in this class, I noticed I was not writing just to finish the assignment, rather it became an actual learning experience, in which I learned to adequately express my beliefs and challenge my own beliefs. Unfortunately, having these kind of learning experience is altogether a rarity in school