Essays

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General Statement of Point 1
Millicent and Mary’s strong desire to fit in leads to their realization that they do not need to change who they are in order to be accepted.

Statement of Point
Millicent’s strong desire to fit in leads to her realization that she does not need to change who she is in order to be accepted.

Example 1
For instance, to be accepted into the sorority she agrees and goes forth with hazing. Despite the humiliating and dangerous task she looks past it and agrees, “Then the girls had led her here, blindfolded still, through the corridors of Betsey Johnson’s house and shut her in the cellar. It would be an hour before they came to get her, but then Rat Court would be all over and she would say what she had to say and go home” (Plath 1).

Explanation 1
Millicent puts up with the hazing in order to be accepted. She realizes agreeing and not making a big deal out of these initiations will get her accepted into the “Magic Circle” after. After analyzing her situation while locked in the cellar, Millicent comes to the conclusion that she should not have to change herself in order to be accepted.

Transition Sentence
While Millicent’s strong desire to fit in leads her into joining the sorority she quickly realizes she doesn’t want to change who she is in order to fit in, Mary assumes a similar fate at Dr. Capra’s office where she try’s on colored lenses to be normal but gets rid of them after and decides to be herself. Both girls want to fit in so bad that they change whom they are in order to fit in. They continue to conform to society for hopes of acceptance, leading to their realization that they don’t need to change who they are for acceptance.

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General Statement Of Point 2
Millicent and Mary conform to society, consequently this leads them to realize they do not need to change who they are in order to be accepted.

Statement of Point 2
Millicent conforms to society, additionally this leads to her realization that she does not need to change whom she to be accepted.

Example 1
Nevertheless Millicent see’s hazing as a normal dialect in order for acceptance into the sorority. When locked in the cellar during initiation she thinks, “ What girl at Lansing High would not want to be in her place now? Millicent thought. Amused. What girl would not want to be of the elect, no matter if it did mean five days of initiation before and after school” (Plath 1).

Explanation 1
Millicent’s concern with being accepted in to the sorority lead her to be locked in a cellar and think it is normal and part of what everyone has to do. She realizes any girl would die to be in her position and she must follow these tasks to be accepted. Helen’s harsh task in the end lead her to the realization that she should not have to commit to these initiations in order to be accepted.

Transition Sentence
While Millicent conforms to society it leads her into deep consideration about the sorority and the realization that she should not have to change who she is for acceptance, similarly Mary goes to the party dressed up as a “normal” cheerleader,

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General Statement of Point 3
Millicent and Mary discover a sense of self-acceptance; afterwards this leads to their realization that they do not need to change who they are in order to fit in.

Statement of Point 3
Millicent discovers a sense of self-acceptance, thus leading her to realize that she does not need to change the way she is to be accepted.

Example 1
Even after going through all the hazing she decides to not join the sorority. While sitting on the cellar floor she thought to herself, “How she had proved something to herself by going through everything, even Rat Court, and then deciding not to join the sorority after all. And how she could be friends with everybody” (Plath 7).

Explanation 1
Millicent realizes she proved she does not need to join the sorority in order to be accepted. She comes to realize she would rather be herself and be friends with everyone. Even thought she went through the tasks, she does not want to change who she is or how she acts in order to be a part of the sorority.

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Statement of Point 1
Mary’s strong desire to fit in leads to her realization that she does not have to change who she is in order to be accepted.

Example 1
For instance, while Mary is walking around Dr. Capra’s office she thinks to herself, “I have spent so many afternoons placing and plucking colored lenses in and out of my eyes. In moments of unrelenting, undisturbed narcissism I would see myself through different eyes and wonder if I could have been head cheerleader.” (Hu 4).

Explanation 1
Mary has low self-esteem with not having normal colored eyes. This leads her to get fake colored lens with the hopes of looking like a normal girl that everyone wants to be. Mary changes herself for the acceptance of others but quickly changes her mind while humiliated and realizes she doesn’t need to change who she is in order to fit in.

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Statement of Point 2
Mary conforms to society, additionally this leads to her realization that she does not need to change whom she to be accepted.

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Statement of point 3
Mary discovers a sense of self-recognition, thus leading her to realize that she does not need to change the way she is to be accepted.

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Introduction

General Sentence
Within society many young females are severely judged on the peers they have or their appearance. More than often they feel the need to change how they look or where they belong, thinking it will be beneficial toward being accepted.
TEXT A
Most fall under the peer pressure, however some break free and realize they should not have to change who they are. In Sylvia Plath’s Initiation Millicent is a young female who wants to join a sorority. Societies idea of this is perfect, although to be accepted she must undergo humiliating, harsh tasks and conform to their rules.

Transition Sentence
While completing the hazing she starts to doubt whether this is the right path for her.

Text B
For Millicent and Mary from Grace Hu’s Snow White, trying to be accepted in society by changing themselves seems inequitable. Mary is albino and changes how she looks by dresses up on Halloween with the hopes of looking pretty. She is quickly brought back to how her peers actually see her and is entirely devastated.

Thesis Statement
In the short stories “Initiation” by Sylvia Plath and “Snow White” by Grace Hu, Millicent and Mary demonstrate a strong desire to fit in, conform to society and discover a sense of self acceptance while coming to the realization that they do not need to change who they are in order to be accepted.

Conclusion
Millicent and Mary come to the realization that they do not need to change who they are in order to fit in, after they demonstrate a strong desire to fit in, conforming to society, and discovering a sense of self-acceptance.