The Banning Of Sara Hill

THE HAUNTING OF SARA HILL is a supernatural thriller. The idea of a vengeful ghost haunting innocent people always seems to resonate with the mainstream audience. The script uses some of the elements that make for a potentially compelling tale. There’s a haunted house, scary noises, ghostly visions, and the threat of physical harm. The plot also has a backstory that drives the current hauntings.

While there are definite strengths to the storytelling, the script would benefit from more development. The story opens strongly with the scene of young Sara Hill and the idea of someone haunting her. It’s creepy and sets the tone for the rest of the tale. The story nicely transitions to the present day story and the introduction of adult Sara Hill.

Unfortunately, as the story
The second act needs to be the call for action or plan to solve the problem. In this case, who attacked Sara and how to get rid of the ghost.

In the second act, Sara needs to be proactive in solving her problem. Right now, Sara’s not proactive at all. She’s a victim and she never does anything to figure out who might have attacked her or why she’s being haunted. It’s Logan who calls the paranormal psychic, Hannah. The most active Sara is, is when she goes to the police to say she won’t testify and when she battles the ghost at the end.

The story is also interrupted by the Miller storyline. While it sets up Hannah, consider making this story in the same time period as the current day storyline, as not to confuse the audience. Also, there’s confusion between 2010 and 2005 (begins with 2010, then goes to 2005).

Also balance the Miller plot more effectively with the main plot. Make sure Sara always drives the action/plot and it should be Sara who seeks out help and tries to solve being haunted. She should come up with a plan of action, it fails, and then she’s forced to come up with another plan of