Surviving In A Community: Personal Narrative

What I was attempting to write was me surviving in a community that I am sometimes not accepted in. In my narrative, I described a particular event that happened in a specific community where I was treated differently from the people around me. I think that the teacher wanted me to analyze different ideas to show differences between discourse communities. What I struggled with the most with was showing rather than telling in my narrative. Adding details and scenery to the story is something I found challenging because I am not good at describing things. I tried to show rather than tell and I added more details but I found this as a struggle because I didn’t know what language to use to describe my surroundings. My favorite sentences in my narrative are “His gaze was burning through my flesh, creating a sensation of sweat and heat. My friends and I tried walking quickly to lose the trail of the security guard but he barely
I liked the process I used to write my narrative. I first started with writing the actual event itself. I started with how it all started, where I was and the people that were involved. And after that is a reflection of what had happened and then I concluded with sharing my thoughts about what happened. After I was done with my first draft. I then added more details on the scenery, the characters, and conclusion. I also attempted to arrange the events that occurred in order so that my story flowed well. Lastly, I was able to add my writing from the Literacy Narrative Part 2 which was about the discourse communities that I am apart of and I was able to add parts of it to my narrative. The changes I made between Tuesday and Thursday were editing my grammar, adding more on my discourse community and taking out repetitive