Ielts Essay Simon Band 9

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Please note: the following essays would all achieve IELTS band 9.

1. Discussion Essay

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.

Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the

motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on

the punishment.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about whether or not punishments for crimes should be fixed.

Although there are some advantages of fixed punishments, I would argue that it is better to

judge each crime individually.

There are some good arguments for having one punishment for each crime. This system

ensures that each member of society knows and understands the consequences of

committing any crime. It is a fair system, and it leaves people with no doubt that breaking

the law is not tolerated. At the same time, it is much easier for judges and lawyers when

there is a clear rule dictating how each offender should be sentenced. For example, if

someone is found guilty of stealing, the judge will simply follow the rules and apply the

appropriate punishment.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that the context of any criminal act should be

taken into account when sentencing an offender. This means that the judge should

consider the details of each particular case before deciding on the appropriate

punishment. For example, a person who steals something from a shop for the first time

should not be treated in the same way as a repeat offender who has been caught

shoplifting many times before. It would be sensible to give the first-time offender a small

punishment, such as a fine, while the repeat offender may be sent to prison.

In conclusion, it seems to me that a mature and humane legal system would be flexible

rather than fixed in terms of how decisions about punishments are made.

(257 words)

ielts-simon.com2. Opinion Essay

Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car

maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at

school.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that children do not learn many practical skills at school. However, I completely

disagree with the idea that schools should teach skills like bank account management and

car maintenance.

At present, most schools focus on important academic subjects such as mathematics,

science and language. These subjects help young people to gain knowledge and to

develop thinking skills that will be vital for their future careers. We live in a knowledgebased economy where independent thinking and problem solving are the most important

skills. With timetables already full, schools do not have time to teach children anything

else.

Furthermore, I do not believe that most practical skills are beneficial enough to be included

in lessons. I would argue that bank account management, for example, is a life skill that

anyone can learn by simply opening and using a bank account. Most adults have no

problem managing their finances without being taught accounting lessons at school. In

fact, I have never met anyone who found it difficult to use a bank account. Other practical

skills like car maintenance or plumbing are not really necessary because most people

prefer to pay a qualified mechanic or plumber. It would be a waste of children’s time if

these subjects were introduced as part of the school curriculum.

In conclusion, schools have always taught the traditional academic subjects that help

students to prepare for university or professional life. If they start to teach practical skills,

the study of important academic subjects will suffer.

(250 words)

ielts-simon.com3. Problem / Solution Essay

Despite huge improvements in healthcare, the overall standard of physical health in...
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