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English Portfolio

Luis Gonzalez

English 95
Professor Shiloh Winsor
May 8, 2013

Luis Gonzalez
Professor Shiloh Winsor
English 95
May 8, 2013
Reflection
Throughout my Writing experience I have always had trouble with making the sentence make sense, making it sound professional and doing what the assignment tells to do. I think that this class has actually helped me a lot more than in High School. The new paragraph is better because I listened to what my peers advised me to do and what the book says how the paragraphs should look like. I think I can still use some work on punctuations, because that’s my weakness I have always struggled with punctuations and I think it’s time to start doing better on those punctuations. Even If I knew how to do punctuations and everything that involves writing a good essay or paragraph I think that there will be still a lot more to learn for me, but I can take a challenge.

Luis Gonzalez
Professor Shiloh Winsor
English 95
May 8, 2013,
Description paragraph (Revised)
I was at the Elma Fair Grounds, entering the building where we bought our tickets. Exiting that same building right when I got out I received a firm smack in the face by some exquisite smells of cotton candy, fries, burgers, popcorn, with a mixture with barn animals, , and burned rubber from the car races that I had missed due to showing up late. At the entrance I saw beautiful, magnificent, serene, massive, horses, next to the horses where playful, pudgy, and muddy pigs. After we passed the barn side that’s when the fries, popcorn and burger aroma kicked in, everywhere I looked I would see food, food stands, people walking around selling food and even food on the ground. However, one of the best parts about a fair are the carnival games. I could hear the sound of glass bottles being struck by a plastic object, which was music to my ears, I instantly knew it was the ring toss game one of my favorite and next to that one was the ping pong ball toss. Balloons popping second after second and a man yelling “WINNER”, I suspected that it would be the balloon pop with darts the worst game ever, basketball toss, in which I ended up spending forty dollars on, Automatic guns going off repeatedly like the sound of a bunch of horses hooves hammering on concrete streets I assumed it would be shooting out the star with a BB gun, another favorite, and the knocking down the pins with a baseball was right next to it. A fair is nothing without the rides, I got the chills listening to kids, teens, and even adults screaming they’re hearts out. That’s when I knew I was going to have a great time. On the left was a propeller type ride where you sit down and go around in circles at a rapid speed, in the center was my all-time favorite the hammer, after riding it three times I felt like I was about to vomit all of my intestines, and on the right was another ride like the hammer but bigger and not nearly as good as the hammer, either way I did witness a couple people puke after that ride, so it’s still scary. It was a great afternoon with a bunch of rides, games, and food to enjoy with friends. I’ll never forget that day and I’ll be back next summer. Comparison paragraph (Revised)

There are two places that I visit a lot in the summer and spring they are Westport and Long Beach. I don’t live in either of the places, but in my comparison paper they are both Interesting places to go to, they are both tourist sites and have the same weather. Long Beach for starts has the beach. The beach is very popular with horseback riders, beachcombers, razor clam hunters and kite flyers. It’s a great place to build a sand castle and, in the warmer summer days, to sunbathe. Long beach also has many places to go to like historical sites like Museums or The Lewis and Clark themed trail worth walking, rollerblading or cycling. It’s a fun place to visit, but probably only in the summer like for the Fourth of July. During the Fourth of July it’s like a...
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