Commentary On The Essay 'The Marble Chaps' By Gary Soto
H: [Nods]
E: We can also apply the same technique when writing our literary essay. See I have here with me and example of a literary essay another Fourth grader wrote. Let’s read her introductory paragraph [I hand the mentor text to Harper and he reads the introductory paragraph aloud].
E: Did you notice… [Harper interjects]
H: Like when it says “Sometimes when we let our fears get us down”, I can say more because it just not facts I can write in my lead.
E: Exactly. Did you also notice that she included the author and name of the text she was writing about- The Marble Champ by Gary Soto
H: [Nods]
E: She did so that if her readers are really drawn to the story and want to read more about the literary text they have all the details to help them …show more content…
So my thesis is about Fox being smart, maybe I’d look for a quote or a write a funny sentence about being smart.
E: Excellent Harper. What are some resources you can refer to, to give you some ideas for your introductory statement?
H: Hmm! Maybe I can say like…I don’t quite know.
E: Perhaps you can look for some ideas in book some of the books you have read?
H: I haven’t read that many books… I do not have any idea of books that can help.
E: Hmm! Hope maybe you can do some research on the internet and see what you can get. You can even use some fancy vocabulary you see on the word wall. This is something that you can take your time to think about.
H: Yes, I can think about it. Maybe I can say, “Sometimes being smart means being calculated.”
E: Good thinking. Calculated is a wordly wise word that is up on our word wall. Nice job!
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E: So we learnt today that when we write a literary essay, we can include a wise or funny statement in our introductory paragraph to hook our readers and draw them into reading the rest of our essay. We also learnt that it is important to also include the name of author and the name of the text we are writing about. Off you go! Remember to make those revisions in your
E: We can also apply the same technique when writing our literary essay. See I have here with me and example of a literary essay another Fourth grader wrote. Let’s read her introductory paragraph [I hand the mentor text to Harper and he reads the introductory paragraph aloud].
E: Did you notice… [Harper interjects]
H: Like when it says “Sometimes when we let our fears get us down”, I can say more because it just not facts I can write in my lead.
E: Exactly. Did you also notice that she included the author and name of the text she was writing about- The Marble Champ by Gary Soto
H: [Nods]
E: She did so that if her readers are really drawn to the story and want to read more about the literary text they have all the details to help them …show more content…
So my thesis is about Fox being smart, maybe I’d look for a quote or a write a funny sentence about being smart.
E: Excellent Harper. What are some resources you can refer to, to give you some ideas for your introductory statement?
H: Hmm! Maybe I can say like…I don’t quite know.
E: Perhaps you can look for some ideas in book some of the books you have read?
H: I haven’t read that many books… I do not have any idea of books that can help.
E: Hmm! Hope maybe you can do some research on the internet and see what you can get. You can even use some fancy vocabulary you see on the word wall. This is something that you can take your time to think about.
H: Yes, I can think about it. Maybe I can say, “Sometimes being smart means being calculated.”
E: Good thinking. Calculated is a wordly wise word that is up on our word wall. Nice job!
Link
E: So we learnt today that when we write a literary essay, we can include a wise or funny statement in our introductory paragraph to hook our readers and draw them into reading the rest of our essay. We also learnt that it is important to also include the name of author and the name of the text we are writing about. Off you go! Remember to make those revisions in your