Analysis Of Hip Hop: The Movement And The Social Challenge

Hip Hop: The Movement and the Social Challenge Hip hop is a musical culture that has undergone rapid development and transformation since its origins during the 1970s in New York City. (I would consider rewording first sentence. The last part of the sentence should maybe be shortened and put at the beginning) What started off first as a relatively underground culture, has rapidly led to a major entertainment industry that has become largely commercialized within mainstream popular culture. (A little confusing, maybe reword by making it tighter ad clearer) Because of the constant attention that hip hop has garnered over the years, its impact on society has progressively become more and more expansive. The true significance and primary purpose
You explain how hip hop first began and how it was used to express feelings, concerns and expression of the life of people growing up in the ghetto to becoming a commercialized product that has mislead society in thinking hip hop is negative. You did a good job in explaining you topic but I’m not very clear on what your thesis is in the first paragraph. Is it the last sentence when you ask about who is to blame for the detrimental music that is so persuasive in modern society? I think that, instead of ending the paragraph with a question you should end it with a strong thesis that has to do with, why society thinks hip hop has such a negative impact on society and children since that’s mainly what your essay is about. Yes it flows from how hip-hop began as a positive voice for people to express the true life realities to becoming a more negative message that glamourizes subjects about money, woman, violence and drugs. You also put in some reasoning of why you like hip hop and the impact it had on your life in the past and now as a mentor in prisons, then you conclude it with your thoughts of the positive and the negative aspects of hip hop culture movement. The flow is pretty good. I think you did a great job summarizing your conclusion. Your essays were very intriguing and I didn’t get to confused with it. I’m very impressed with your wording and how much you were able to write about hip. I might suggest using some of the lyrics or quotes from some strong positive hip hop artists like grandmaster flash and the furious 5 and then maybe some examples of some negative gangster rap that is considered hip hop and the type of impact they had. I know you mention how society thinks hip hop is all about music, so maybe you can give some examples or explanations on what else is considered hip hop…such as fashion, clothes, shoes, dancing, style, talk, walk, hair styles. I agree with