Dream Men Play Review
DREAM-MAN is a fantasy, superhero story that presents with a really fun and entertaining concept. The ability to dream about the future isn’t entirely new to the industry, but it’s a nice setup for comedy, drama, conflict, action, and character development.
The overall tone is light-hearted and the characters are likable. The goal is clear and the stakes are both personal and physical.
The script is driven by solid themes about following one’s dream and about making our own dreams come true. There’s certainly a lot to like about the concept, however, at the same time, the script would benefit from more development, especially in the area of structure, pace, and tension.
The first act sets up the ordinary world of Billy, the protagonist. …show more content…
It runs too long at 118 pages.
There are non-essential characters or characters that don’t really contribute to the plot as well as they could. For example, Dr. Flemmer doesn’t feel needed or well used. The script could work just as well without him.
Billy is very likable and he has a worthy goal, but he’s not proactive enough in going after it. Work on making him more proactive and show how he overcomes his inner struggle (insecure, lacks confidence, failure to save parents) and how he achieves his external goal. It appears that Billy may struggle with the idea that he couldn’t “save” his parents. Explore this more and reveal that he wants to be a hero because he feels he failed his parents. On a smaller note, it’s not clear why he dreams about the past (the accident) vs. the future.
Butch is very likable. She’s independent, spunky, and very vulnerable, but because of the structure, she’s not fully developed or used as well as she could be.
Robbie, the brother, is also likable. They have personal conflict. Robbie feels trapped caring for Billy. This works well to create personal conflict and tension, but it doesn’t feel like there’s a true resolution between the brothers. However, the scene in which Robbie brings in the action figure at the end is very sweet. Robbie does have an arc as he realizes that he doesn’t want
The overall tone is light-hearted and the characters are likable. The goal is clear and the stakes are both personal and physical.
The script is driven by solid themes about following one’s dream and about making our own dreams come true. There’s certainly a lot to like about the concept, however, at the same time, the script would benefit from more development, especially in the area of structure, pace, and tension.
The first act sets up the ordinary world of Billy, the protagonist. …show more content…
It runs too long at 118 pages.
There are non-essential characters or characters that don’t really contribute to the plot as well as they could. For example, Dr. Flemmer doesn’t feel needed or well used. The script could work just as well without him.
Billy is very likable and he has a worthy goal, but he’s not proactive enough in going after it. Work on making him more proactive and show how he overcomes his inner struggle (insecure, lacks confidence, failure to save parents) and how he achieves his external goal. It appears that Billy may struggle with the idea that he couldn’t “save” his parents. Explore this more and reveal that he wants to be a hero because he feels he failed his parents. On a smaller note, it’s not clear why he dreams about the past (the accident) vs. the future.
Butch is very likable. She’s independent, spunky, and very vulnerable, but because of the structure, she’s not fully developed or used as well as she could be.
Robbie, the brother, is also likable. They have personal conflict. Robbie feels trapped caring for Billy. This works well to create personal conflict and tension, but it doesn’t feel like there’s a true resolution between the brothers. However, the scene in which Robbie brings in the action figure at the end is very sweet. Robbie does have an arc as he realizes that he doesn’t want