Essay for Long Term Career Plan

My goal is [rather than "My career goals are"] to attain a career where I can express my artistic talent and passion for art as well as open my mind in ways that I could never do in any other field [instead of "at any other career"]. To obtain these goals, I must set a track.[I'm not sure what this means--set a track?] After considering many other career opportunities [rather than "looking to many other vantage points resulting in faint success" which sounds somewhat negative], such as [delete "considering" here] the army, attempting to obtain a job at Boeing, and looking into various other art colleges [not collages], to name a few, I have found that the Art Institute of Seattle has just the programs I'm looking for and just what I need to be successful at my goals.

It has been a life-long [add hyphen] dream of mine to put my imagination, with my world and characters, into life-like [add hyphen] animation. I would like to create video gaming with three dimensional modeling as well as flash animation with thrilling story-lines that appeal not just to myself, but to other viewers. My portfolio reflects much of my ideas and that [delete "of"] which I am passionate about. The Art Institute of Seattle offers just the right animation programs I need to obtain these goals--everything from simple flash animation to advanced three dimensional modeling in an interactive digital world.

With this experience, I can gain a career I'll love for the rest of my life. I would be eligible to work at popular gaming and animation companies such as Blizzard, EA Games, and Forgotten Realms, [delete "in"] which I have been a fan of for many years, using skills learned from the Art Institute of Seattle. I want to learn [instead of "These skills being"] two dimensional and three dimensional animation and techniques, story boarding, scripting, and rendering.

I am very passionate about art and want to excel in it. Therefore, I am [delete "strongly"] willing to participate in whatever