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ATS2743/3743 – seminar week 3
Writing job applications – language features
Writing Selection Criteria – format, structure,
content, language
Online applications
New forms of resume?

greetings
Warm felicitations my lord,
To whom it may concern,

be nice and be more specific

Kind Sir,

find out the name

Dear Miss Jones
Dear Ms/Mr/Dr/Professor Smith

dear sir/ madam
dear (title) family name

Dear Sir/Madam,

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Opening words…
thank you for reading my
application.

pleading …. not good

I am most interested in your you want their job.. nnot the one advertised position…
I would like to enquire further
about the fascinating position
offfered at...

want more information, not applying

informal

I am very keen to apply for a
position in a company which is
results oriented and on the brink of
success such as yours.

sounds generic, which organisation?
brink of success: means they are not

i am writing to apply for the position as a junior account manager at E& Y ( no abbrievation) as advertised on seek.com recently

Avoid…
‘colourful’ Adjectives
(hyperbole)
Empty statements
Cliches
Abbreviations

show dont tell which applies here
you are telling your results

I have recently completed a degree in
astrophysics at Monash university with
avoid some adjectives
stellar results.
I have developed excellent skills in written
communication as well as a thirst for cliche
demonstrate why you have the certain skill
learning.

Negative language

I currently hold a certificate as an MMA
trainer with DJ’s and practice regular TM.

False optimism
(demonstrating how little
you really know).

While I have no experience as a lion
tamer I am sure that I could learn quickly if
given the opportunity.
do not, would not
desperation
wouldnt that mean you are willing to learn?

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include
CONCRETE – TANGIBLE Demonstrations of achievement
or skill (are you sure they will know
what it means?)
Active language – Action
statements
(should always be linked to
what?)
what shoukld they be linked to?
they should be linked to the CV
and job description (
selection criteria)

In my current position as a labtechnician I have used Magnetic Resonance imagers to prepare
diagnostic screening reports.

results attached to relevant
experience

Throughout my degree I have
held a variety of part-time and
casual positions through which I
have developed team-work and
leadership skills. I have
demonstrated leadership
through my participation in the
PAL program at Monash.
Could be better?

no direct expereince?
teachablility
learning, able to pick up, and adapting

4 paragraph format
what do you want to do?
what you know about the company
what makes you relevant
close it up conclusion

Closing lines
I am extraordinarily well suited
to this position and think that
you would find that I am an
excellent candidate.
I am looking forward to an
interview at your
convenience.

I believe that I have many
qualities suited to this position
and would welcome the
opportunity for an interview to
discuss the application further.

look at cover letter on monash site
COVER LETTER RULE
1 PAGE FORMAT

i am happy to coem with the opporuntity for an interview

yours sincerley

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Resume language
Generic:

Specific:

I have many skills of value in the
modern workplace including
communication and peopleskills.

something tangible

Communication skills
- 

demonstrated through
achieving customer service
award at National Australia
Bank.

- 

Demonstrated through
completion of client ready
project reports in Marketing
Design.

Resumes - the bullet point problem!
Good:

Bad:

Communication skills

Communication skills

- 

demonstrated through
achieving customer service
award at National Australia
Bank.

- 

I have developed strong
communication...
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