Biker
Gar
Spoleman
English 97
11/12/12
1.We could hear them coming way off in the distance, winding down the road through mountains east of town.
1. Winding down the road through the mountains east of town, they were way off in the distance, and we could hear them.
2. The sound made us think of deeper and louder power saws, but it was more sustained.
2. Being more sustained, the sound made us think of deeper and louder power saws.
3. The brush is thick and full of shadows where the first rider broke into view at the edge of town.
3. At the edge of town, the first rider broke into view through the brush that is thick and full of shadows.
4. The others rapped their pipes, swarmed behind them, and brought a wave of rumbling noise.
4. Rumbling a wave of noise, the others rapped their pipes and swarmed behind them.
5. The leader geared down at the grocery store setting a swaggering pace through the middle of town, and the people watched from the sidewalk as he did not glace or acknowledge them.
5. As he did not glace to the side or acknowledge the people watching from the sidewalk, the leader geared down at the grocery store setting a swaggering pace through the middle of the town.
6. The others started at his back trying to imitating him.
6. Trying to imitating him, the others stared at his back.
7. He lifted his black gloved fist at the state highway that intersects Main Street.
7. On the state highway that intersects Main Street he lifted his black gloved fist.
8. The pack leaned to the right and followed his lead, accelerating in the open road in the distance to the horizon.
8. In the distance towards the horizon, the pack leaned to the right and followed his lead accelerating in the open road.
9. From the motorcycles, the exhaust ripped the air and was like a insult that took all day to heal.
9. Taking all day to heal, the motorcycles ripped the air and was like an
Spoleman
English 97
11/12/12
1.We could hear them coming way off in the distance, winding down the road through mountains east of town.
1. Winding down the road through the mountains east of town, they were way off in the distance, and we could hear them.
2. The sound made us think of deeper and louder power saws, but it was more sustained.
2. Being more sustained, the sound made us think of deeper and louder power saws.
3. The brush is thick and full of shadows where the first rider broke into view at the edge of town.
3. At the edge of town, the first rider broke into view through the brush that is thick and full of shadows.
4. The others rapped their pipes, swarmed behind them, and brought a wave of rumbling noise.
4. Rumbling a wave of noise, the others rapped their pipes and swarmed behind them.
5. The leader geared down at the grocery store setting a swaggering pace through the middle of town, and the people watched from the sidewalk as he did not glace or acknowledge them.
5. As he did not glace to the side or acknowledge the people watching from the sidewalk, the leader geared down at the grocery store setting a swaggering pace through the middle of the town.
6. The others started at his back trying to imitating him.
6. Trying to imitating him, the others stared at his back.
7. He lifted his black gloved fist at the state highway that intersects Main Street.
7. On the state highway that intersects Main Street he lifted his black gloved fist.
8. The pack leaned to the right and followed his lead, accelerating in the open road in the distance to the horizon.
8. In the distance towards the horizon, the pack leaned to the right and followed his lead accelerating in the open road.
9. From the motorcycles, the exhaust ripped the air and was like a insult that took all day to heal.
9. Taking all day to heal, the motorcycles ripped the air and was like an