why i want to become an xray tech

First off let me tell you writing is not my strong suit! I'm applying for a Kaiser Permanente Scholarship for my Radiologic Technology Program. I was not given anything as far as specifications and my prompt is "a written essay describing personal goals, achievements and accomplishments". Any advice would be greatly appreciated! Thank you in advance. Here is what I've come up with:

Vince Lombardi once said, "The price of success is hard work, dedication to the job at hand, and the determination that whether we win or lose, we have applied the best of ourselves to the task at hand." I admire the words written here and try to apply them in my everyday life. Now that I am part of the Pasadena City College Radiology Program I find these words more important than ever. The only thing that is not fitting about this quote is that when I put my mind to something, as though I have for school, and someone else is depending on my actions, I will not lose. Not only will my patients rely on me to provide them with the best care possible but also I will someday have a family that relies on my success in the field. This being said, even though I'm only a handful of months in I've dedicated my self to this program by setting personal goals, some of which I've already achieved and some of which I've yet to achieve but have made a promise to myself to accomplish.
When I was applying to radiology programs across the state my only wish was to be accepted to one in Northern California so as to be close to my friends, family, fiancé and life as I knew it. At the time, I thought it was unfortunate that the only school lottery in which I was lucky enough to "win" a position in was at Pasadena City College, but as it turns out, I don't think I could have found a better fit in schools. Although leaving my comfortable country girl farm life for the city life of LA is the biggest curve ball that has yet been thrown at me I've decided to put all that I can into this program and make my