This paper discusses the possible hidden agendas for the United States’ war with Iraq. The thesis is that with a strong influence of Neoconservatives within the government the decision to invade Iraq was based on their strong desire to remain a world superpower as well as achieve power through the attainment of Iraqi oil reserves and breakdown and control of Iraqi’s means of self-defense. The author believes that neoconservatives, or people who focus on the developments of other countries in order to maintain the title of the United States as the “world’s superpower”. The author argues the point that blueprints for the war in Iraq were made long before the terrorist attacks or before any weapons of mass destruction were discovered. It is argued that government officials have twisted the facts in order to persuade the citizens of the United States that a war with Iraq is the right course of action, although the war was actually motivated by our desire for world domination, superiority, and more resources (oil). The author basically covers the idea that the war in Iraq was in the works for a long time before it actually occurred, and when the terrorists from September 11th, 2001 struck the World Trade Center and the Pentagon, the fear that consumed the US citizens was used by the government to justify a war they had wanted for so long.
The author does an excellent job in the organization of the paper for the most part. The points seem to follow well with one another, and most of the points are explained well. The paper is very easy for the reader to comprehend. The use of quotes throughout the paper are well-selected and powerful in helping to persuade readers of the theory; quotes such as the remarks from Colin Powell and Mark Wolfowitz are the most convincing in proving the points they follow. The background information given (like the information about Cheney’s help in the George Bush administration and the reasons for continued speculation on the whereabouts of nuclear weapons in Iraq) helps the reader to understand the situation. The arguments about the United States’ desire for more access to oil in Iraq were extremely convincing in and of themselves.
While the paper has a decent organizational scheme, there are some parts of the structure that require much more elaboration and support. At one point, the author argues the changes in foreign policy regarding the war (paragraph 11), but does not even begin to describe any changes in foreign policy that occurred as a result of the desire for power within the paragraph. The topic sentence did not really fit the information given. The strength of the argument of war with Iraq for their oil required more hard facts.
Aside from a few missing commas and other minor details, the grammatical aspects of the paper are very good. A few of the sentences were a little difficult to understand such as the sentence arguing Cheney’s involvement in furthering the war. It is the quote saying “in addition, Iraq was the only country the United States regularly, if intermittently, bombed these”. It was unclear as to what the “these” was referring to. Also, in paragraph 12, prior to the quote by Wolfowitz, the author writes that “ and not in be a dictative power”; this sentence does not make sense.
Perhaps adding some quotes from Colin Powell’s speeches on the weapons of mass destruction in Iraq would also help to reinforce the idea of the corruption of the government and its officials during the entire Iraq debacle. Explaining the reasons for terrorism fueling the justification of war with Iraq and the country’s ideas about involvement in the 9-11 attacks. The last sentence seemed weak as well in that it wasn‘t as decisive and persuasive in proving the thesis as it could have been.
This paper is helpful in helping everyone understand modern society because it deals with such an important issue in our time. As Americans, we all need to be aware of our government and the happenings within it, especially as a democracy. The war with Iraq is clearly one of the most important issues occurring in our world today; one just has to look at the recent election results to see how the lack of faith in our government is changing our country.