July 8, 2013
I felt I was well prepared for my first speech, I knew my research very well and felt like my arrangement and flow throughout the speech was well organized. If I had to change a couple of things I would definitely change my emotional approach. I felt like I didn’t change my tone of voice. I think that was the case because I was nervous coming into my speech and towards the end I was more comfortable and I started to change my voice and my emotional approach was better. I felt that it was well organized, I structured it well because of every item that I ended with, it picked up from what I was talking about. During my items I organized it well enough so that the audience knew what I was talking about. I didn’t jumble around with anything so that the audience would be lost. I used this pattern because it is very important to stick with something that you are talking about and to provide information on that particular subject and not go sentence after sentence talking about something else. I felt like my introduction could have used some work because I started off by just saying my name and getting right to my items. I felt like my conclusion was well organized. I was talking about my future item and once I was finished with that I said, “I have lived a very blessed 22 years and I am excited to see what the future holds, Thank you”. I will continue to work on my conclusions and make them better for my next two speeches. I provided good evidence and support through my speech. When I was showing my items, I talked about them clear enough and provided support after showing the audience my items. Some things I would change for my future speeches would be not to stumble with my voice and try not to get so nervous and talk clear. I feel like the baseball I showed was the most effective because I provided a lot of detail about my whole life story about my baseball career. A classmate that was sitting right next to me took the video of me. It was very effective in enhancing my message because that was the first time I’ve ever seen myself through a video speaking to people so I thought it was very interesting. It provided a lot of good information because when reviewing my video, I had no idea I said some of the stuff I did. Practicing at home helped a lot. I will learn from my mistakes after watching the video and the one thing I noticed that I did wrong was I moved around a lot. I believe my delivery was decent. My verbal delivery was not that great because my voice was shaky and you can tell I was very nervous. I didn’t use my note cards which was a good sign because I knew my information. Another verbal approach that needs some work but was kind of okay was my eye delivery. My nonverbal delivery was good because I was moving my hands and I was dressed appropriate. I can improve my nonverbal message by interacting more with the audience and expressing my emotions more when I talk. I feel like the audience was interested. I didn’t get a good glimpse of the audience because the video was focused on me but I remember them looking up at me like they were interested. One weakness that I pointed out was I was still shaky with my voice; this was because I was nervous. Number two was I was moving around a little bit, I need to stand more still. The final weakness was I didn’t sound emotional. I need to sound more interesting and move tones on my voice. My number one strength was my knowledge and organization through the speech I knew what I was talking about and didn’t stumble a lot. My eye delivery amazed me; I couldn’t believe how much I looked up and interacted with the audience but still needs some work. The last strength was my approach. It looks like I knew a lot about what I was talking about and I delivered a good message. When I go on to do my next speeches some improvements that I will bring will be not getting so nervous when I get up there and bring a more clearer message to the audience, stand more still and not move around as much, and sound more emotional and bring a different tone to my voice and not sound so monotone.