Simulated Prison Evaluation
An Evaluation of “A Study of Prisoners and Guards in a Simulated Prison”
“A Study of Prisoners and Guards in a Simulated Prison” is a research article written by Craig Haney, Curtis Banks and Philip Zimbardo. The basis of the psychological experiment performed was to study and research the effects of being a prisoner and a guard in a simulated prison environment. The focus being the patterns and behavior characterized by both parties and to investigate how easily the subjects were susceptible to conforming to their assigned roles. Some passages within the paper are understandable and easily read, but the overall sentence structure is poor and messy making easy ideas complicated and unnecessarily confusing. Many examples throughout the paper …show more content…
The word implement in this sentence is an example of the use of a fuzzy verb, it says something happened, but not what. Replacing the fuzzy verb, implement, with an action verb will make the sentence much less indecisive. An action verb that can be used here to replace implement could be the world perform, a much more concrete and clear word which is necessary in science writing. Using short direct words can keep the writing from getting …show more content…
It does an excellent job setting the rest of the paragraph up for the reader. “In conclusion, we believe this demonstration reveals new dimensions in the social psychology of imprisonment worth pursuing in future research.” (Haney, Banks, Zimbardo, page 17) This short, to the point, and precise sentence clearly gets the point across and is easy for the reader to understand. There is a clear subject, verb, and object easily found and understandable all while making a bold statement.
Paragraphs that begin with a strong well written topic sentence that tie in the whole purpose of the paragraph make for well written and easy to read writing. The last paragraph on page 14 begins with an excellent example of a strong topic sentence. “We might also question whether there are meaningful non-violent alternatives as models for behavior modification in real prisons” (Haney, Banks, Zimbardo, page 14). This sentence does an excellent job setting the paragraph up, it grabs the reader’s attention and transitions into the topic of the paragraph
“A Study of Prisoners and Guards in a Simulated Prison” is a research article written by Craig Haney, Curtis Banks and Philip Zimbardo. The basis of the psychological experiment performed was to study and research the effects of being a prisoner and a guard in a simulated prison environment. The focus being the patterns and behavior characterized by both parties and to investigate how easily the subjects were susceptible to conforming to their assigned roles. Some passages within the paper are understandable and easily read, but the overall sentence structure is poor and messy making easy ideas complicated and unnecessarily confusing. Many examples throughout the paper …show more content…
The word implement in this sentence is an example of the use of a fuzzy verb, it says something happened, but not what. Replacing the fuzzy verb, implement, with an action verb will make the sentence much less indecisive. An action verb that can be used here to replace implement could be the world perform, a much more concrete and clear word which is necessary in science writing. Using short direct words can keep the writing from getting …show more content…
It does an excellent job setting the rest of the paragraph up for the reader. “In conclusion, we believe this demonstration reveals new dimensions in the social psychology of imprisonment worth pursuing in future research.” (Haney, Banks, Zimbardo, page 17) This short, to the point, and precise sentence clearly gets the point across and is easy for the reader to understand. There is a clear subject, verb, and object easily found and understandable all while making a bold statement.
Paragraphs that begin with a strong well written topic sentence that tie in the whole purpose of the paragraph make for well written and easy to read writing. The last paragraph on page 14 begins with an excellent example of a strong topic sentence. “We might also question whether there are meaningful non-violent alternatives as models for behavior modification in real prisons” (Haney, Banks, Zimbardo, page 14). This sentence does an excellent job setting the paragraph up, it grabs the reader’s attention and transitions into the topic of the paragraph