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12. If you were the author, would you have ended the story in a different way? Why? How so?

Yes, I would have ended it differently. I would have killed off Tom, Daisy, and Jordan. To me stories that end with people who have wronged others and get away with it are terrible stories. I would have had Tom and Daisy have a car accident that would of kill them. Another way I would have ended the story would be, Jordan's golf career goes down hill and when that happens she can't except it, then she loses her mind and kills herself.
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