Placebo Effect Analysis

Original passage #1
Another reason that DTC advertisements need stricter regulations is because the advertisements mislead consumers with distorted information about drugs. Furthermore, as DTC advertisements give consumers the wrong perspective, consumers would expect false consequences. These false consequences sometimes turn out to be a placebo effect. However, the problem is that placebo effect requires many random circumstances to be triggered, such as doctors and devices (Almasi et al. 284). Therefore, it is hard to expect for all patients to generate a placebo effect. Moreover, these false expectations disrupt the physician-patient relationship because consumers who are educated by misleading advertisements would require alternative treatment
I introduce one researcher’s appropriate opinion about how hard a placebo effect could be triggered. This citation supports my argument that a placebo effect derived from false information about drugs does not apply to all patient, so it is not a good method of treating patients in a general way. To make a flow of sentences clear, I add a direct explanation of why a placebo effect is concerned, such as “the placebo effect derived from the promotion of DTC advertisements reduce the amount of required treatments for patients” Also, I add my explanation of why the placebo effect is an inappropriate way to treat patients and show how the citation supports my argument. Furthermore, I add a sentence at the end of this passage to remind that distorted information from DTC advertisements generates the false consequences, and I explain why the placebo effect is related to regulations against DTC advertisements by adding “the placebo effect induced by highly distorted drug information from DTC advertisements have negative impacts on patients’
I used the opinion of the Government Accountability Office to add credibility to the paper and one researcher’s perspective on dominating DTC advertisements to support my idea. However, to make a flow of sentences clear, I demonstrate how GAO’s agreement is effective to my argument by adding a follow-up sentence, “GAO also realizes that DTC advertisements mislead patients, spur unnecessary drug prescribing, which is more expensive and ineffective than older alternatives, and raise the cost of health care.” Also, I add an explanation that makes a clear connection between my argument and Almasi’s research: why the unequal chance of competition in the pharmaceutical industry has negative impacts on economic consequences. Furthermore, for better understanding, I elaborate why people who do not have enough skills to evaluate the drugs could indirectly affect the increase in the cost of health care. Also, as I focus on economic effects of DTC advertisements in this passage, I delete “social, and political consequences” at the last