Peer Review Sheet Analysis
Peer Review Sheet (Research Paper)
Student’s Name:______________ Gabrielle Friedman
_____________________
Student Editor____________Gregory Thrope
Mark yes or no and discuss your comments with the student.
INTRODUCTION:
__NO Clear and interesting opening that grabs the reader’s attention? Use of an introductory device present?
THESIS:
____NO Does thesis express a clear and specific central idea that makes a point about the topic? Is it near the end/ last sentence in the introduction part of paper?
TOPIC SENTENCES:
Topic sentences are the following:
___yes__worded clearly,
__yes___name the point the writer develops in each part of the paper, and
____yes_connect the reader back to the main idea expressed in the thesis …show more content…
Many people have said Freemasons, Obama, Jay-z, even Beyoncé were members of the Illuminati of which all have claimed the accusations to be false. If you were a member of a secret society of course you would say people were lying, but why would you continue to give people a reason to believe that you were, and of course society feeds off of entertainment that’s what makes these people rich. Society has tried to ruin President Obamas name many of times with false accusations, and saying that he is apart of illuminati is one of them. “During the 2008 election there were countless allegations made against Barack Obama’s character. He was accused of being a Muslim, a Marxist, and the Antichrist himself.”(DUBE) Jay-z also has said that the rumors about him being involved with the illuminati are false, in an interview he said “It may sound a little arrogant, but I just think people can’t handle when somebody else is successful. Something has gotta be wrong; you gotta be down with some higher power. And I guess when someone else is successful, it makes you feel like maybe you’re a failure. So it can’t be you, it has to be some other …show more content…
Society says that we can identify people belonging to the illuminati by the hand signs, and symbols that they use. For instance the Dollar bill is known to have all sorts of symbols related to the illuminati printed on it but how do we really know where these symbols come from and what they mean. “One thing that most people do not understand is that these symbols are from ancient Egypt. They are not evil symbols and just because someone is into ancient Egyptian culture does not mean they worship the devil. To assume so is coming from a limited (usually Christian) point of view that demonizes anything and everything that does not fit within its social construct.”(ALI) The all seeing Eye that is known to be on the dollar bill is said to be one of the biggest symbols used by the illuminati. Jay-z is known to throw up the Rock-a-fella diamond because that is his record labels symbol. “Many people think Jay-Z is Illuminati because they see him with symbols such as the pyramid, the “all seeing eye”, also known as the “eye of Horus”, and also the “roc” sign Jay-Z makes with his hands which is a symbol of a diamond (or pyramid depending on who you
Student’s Name:______________ Gabrielle Friedman
_____________________
Student Editor____________Gregory Thrope
Mark yes or no and discuss your comments with the student.
INTRODUCTION:
__NO Clear and interesting opening that grabs the reader’s attention? Use of an introductory device present?
THESIS:
____NO Does thesis express a clear and specific central idea that makes a point about the topic? Is it near the end/ last sentence in the introduction part of paper?
TOPIC SENTENCES:
Topic sentences are the following:
___yes__worded clearly,
__yes___name the point the writer develops in each part of the paper, and
____yes_connect the reader back to the main idea expressed in the thesis …show more content…
Many people have said Freemasons, Obama, Jay-z, even Beyoncé were members of the Illuminati of which all have claimed the accusations to be false. If you were a member of a secret society of course you would say people were lying, but why would you continue to give people a reason to believe that you were, and of course society feeds off of entertainment that’s what makes these people rich. Society has tried to ruin President Obamas name many of times with false accusations, and saying that he is apart of illuminati is one of them. “During the 2008 election there were countless allegations made against Barack Obama’s character. He was accused of being a Muslim, a Marxist, and the Antichrist himself.”(DUBE) Jay-z also has said that the rumors about him being involved with the illuminati are false, in an interview he said “It may sound a little arrogant, but I just think people can’t handle when somebody else is successful. Something has gotta be wrong; you gotta be down with some higher power. And I guess when someone else is successful, it makes you feel like maybe you’re a failure. So it can’t be you, it has to be some other …show more content…
Society says that we can identify people belonging to the illuminati by the hand signs, and symbols that they use. For instance the Dollar bill is known to have all sorts of symbols related to the illuminati printed on it but how do we really know where these symbols come from and what they mean. “One thing that most people do not understand is that these symbols are from ancient Egypt. They are not evil symbols and just because someone is into ancient Egyptian culture does not mean they worship the devil. To assume so is coming from a limited (usually Christian) point of view that demonizes anything and everything that does not fit within its social construct.”(ALI) The all seeing Eye that is known to be on the dollar bill is said to be one of the biggest symbols used by the illuminati. Jay-z is known to throw up the Rock-a-fella diamond because that is his record labels symbol. “Many people think Jay-Z is Illuminati because they see him with symbols such as the pyramid, the “all seeing eye”, also known as the “eye of Horus”, and also the “roc” sign Jay-Z makes with his hands which is a symbol of a diamond (or pyramid depending on who you