Lesson 9, Exercise Analysis
In lesson 9, exercise 9.3 we had to choose between five examples and edit one of them for both unnecessary metadiscourse and redundancy. This exercise was designed to help us understand how to eliminate metadiscourse from our writings. we will examine these two examples 1a which is the incorrect version and 1b which is the correct revised version.
1a. It is my belief that in regard to terrestrial-type snakes, an assumption can be made that there are probably none in unmapped areas of the world surpassing the size of those we already have knowledge of.
1b. An assumption can be made about terrestrial-type snakes; those in unmapped areas do not surpass the size of snakes that we know about.
In example 1a, the redundancy metadiscourse is
1a. It is my belief that in regard to terrestrial-type snakes, an assumption can be made that there are probably none in unmapped areas of the world surpassing the size of those we already have knowledge of.
1b. An assumption can be made about terrestrial-type snakes; those in unmapped areas do not surpass the size of snakes that we know about.
In example 1a, the redundancy metadiscourse is