L Appel Du Vide Analysis

You tackled some really thought-provoking themes in your poems, and I think were largely successful in doing so. I think if you just revisit some specific aspects of each piece, they could be even stronger. In “L’appel du vide”, I thought your poem perfectly captured the feelings associated with the phrase “l’appel du vide”, itself. At the beginning, your word choices of “shattering”, “cut”, and “jagged”, all of which have negative connotations, started to create a darker, ominous tone. However, by the end the speaker seemed intrigued and almost pleased with the situation being described as you write “It gives a giddy rush/that feels too much like a high,/weightless with your feet/against the rock”. This embodies the cognitive dissonance that occurs when you step close to the edge of something very high up. Nicely done! My only worry is that this message was too evident in the poem. If you were inspired to write a poem based off of the idea of “l’appel du vide”, I think you were extremely successful. But, I think the end of the poem would be more of a twist, a credible surprise, if the title were not so telling. For those who do not understand the title’s meaning, this would not apply. However, I think a lot of people would be inclined to look up the
This was a great effect. There were some points where I found the phrasing a bit odd, but I think simple editing will fix that. Also, I thought your use painting walls as part of a metaphor in your poem was a great idea, but I think it may have been too explicitly touched upon too often. Maybe having only a few lines, or even allusions to this concept could be as effective without over doing it? If nobody else has this reaction, then ignore this idea, but this was simply my thinking by the end of the