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I think you did well on your introductory paragraph. First, you grab my attettion on the begining sentence describing how the children thought of their father. Next, you provided descriptive sentences to explain why they of their father that way. Then, a thesis statement to introduce Jame Bang was more than just an ordinary man. I am curious to find out what he did that impacted many people in the community.
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