Friendship
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(1) I want to talk about friendship. Friends can change your life. So, you must know who is a real friend. Firstly, your friend must understand you and of course, you must understand her, too. I think, another important point in a friendship is confidence. You mustn 't tell lies to each other. In addition, you must say everything about yourself. I think these are important for a friendship. If you have a friend like this, you don 't break up with her because a real friend is not found easily.
Friends play great roles in our lives so we must know our friends. Firstly, your friend must understand you and of course, you must understand her, too. I think another important point in a friendship is confidence. You mustn 't tell lies to each other. In addition, you must say everything about yourself. I think these are important for a friendship. If you have a friend like this, you don 't break up with her because a real friend is not found easily.
(2) First of all, a friend mustn 't tell lie. He must always tell me the truth and he must be honest because if there is honesty between two friends, their relationship will last until death. In addition to honesty, helping or being near a friend on a bad day is very important. Another point to consider is that he must criticize me if I make a mistake.
There are three qualities that I need to see in a good friend. First, a good friend shouldn 't tell lies. I need to trust him so that I can talk to him. Second, a good friend should be there when I needed him. I should be able to find him near me when I am in a bad mood or when I have a problem. Finally, when necessary, he should criticize me so that I can change my undesirable behaviour or see where I am wrong. I think, these three qualities are the basic properties in a good friend.
(3) Friends play a great role in our
(1) I want to talk about friendship. Friends can change your life. So, you must know who is a real friend. Firstly, your friend must understand you and of course, you must understand her, too. I think, another important point in a friendship is confidence. You mustn 't tell lies to each other. In addition, you must say everything about yourself. I think these are important for a friendship. If you have a friend like this, you don 't break up with her because a real friend is not found easily.
Friends play great roles in our lives so we must know our friends. Firstly, your friend must understand you and of course, you must understand her, too. I think another important point in a friendship is confidence. You mustn 't tell lies to each other. In addition, you must say everything about yourself. I think these are important for a friendship. If you have a friend like this, you don 't break up with her because a real friend is not found easily.
(2) First of all, a friend mustn 't tell lie. He must always tell me the truth and he must be honest because if there is honesty between two friends, their relationship will last until death. In addition to honesty, helping or being near a friend on a bad day is very important. Another point to consider is that he must criticize me if I make a mistake.
There are three qualities that I need to see in a good friend. First, a good friend shouldn 't tell lies. I need to trust him so that I can talk to him. Second, a good friend should be there when I needed him. I should be able to find him near me when I am in a bad mood or when I have a problem. Finally, when necessary, he should criticize me so that I can change my undesirable behaviour or see where I am wrong. I think, these three qualities are the basic properties in a good friend.
(3) Friends play a great role in our