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Compared to my first draft my second draft is more concise and organized. I tried to restructure my ideas in order to transition smoothly from paragraphs and plates. As I started to write my final draft, I noticed I didn’t like my argument and evidence. I decided to rearticulate my thesis and rephrase my evidence to have a clearer argument. I also changed the structure of my essay to make my point of view understandable. Before my peers had trouble understanding my thesis and weren’t able to arrive at a conclusion from my first draft. In order to synthesize my essay, I had to cut irrelevant information and analyze my evidence to select the plates that support my argument. The most helpful advice that I received from my peers was to restate
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