Bartholomae's Essay 'White Shoes'
I. Major Essay #1
A. The following Essays are listed from least successful to most successful. The “White Shoes” paper; the “Clay Model” paper; the second “Jazz” essay; the first “Jazz” essay; and the “Composing Songs” essay.
II. The explanation and supportive reasoning why these papers are ranked the way they are. A. “White Shoes” paper 1. This student has misspelled some words and also did not use correct punctuation, causing some sentences to be run on sentences. 2. “They agreed that it did look better and they changed there combination to go along with mine.” (Bartholomae 150) B. “Clay Model” paper 1.This student was trying to write at a higher level of intelligence than what the student was capable of. 2.
A. The following Essays are listed from least successful to most successful. The “White Shoes” paper; the “Clay Model” paper; the second “Jazz” essay; the first “Jazz” essay; and the “Composing Songs” essay.
II. The explanation and supportive reasoning why these papers are ranked the way they are. A. “White Shoes” paper 1. This student has misspelled some words and also did not use correct punctuation, causing some sentences to be run on sentences. 2. “They agreed that it did look better and they changed there combination to go along with mine.” (Bartholomae 150) B. “Clay Model” paper 1.This student was trying to write at a higher level of intelligence than what the student was capable of. 2.