A Raisin In The Sun And Madame Riding Crop's House Of Licoline

The Portfolio Process assigned by Mr. Ferry, my English instructor, was a chance for me to restructure four pieces of writing I did this year. These revisions are supposed to be an improvement from the original draft. The four pieces of writing I decided to fix: A Raisin in the Sun essay, Holden's voice, “Girl” story, and a blurb to the James Judd performance, Madame Riding Crop’s House of Licoline. I chose to correct these assignments because I really enjoyed writing them. There were many ideas of mine that I wanted to incorporate as well as key developments that Mr. Ferry noticed was missing and recommended I could include in these writings specifically. Now, I have the opportunity to advance the works style with the ideas I didn't get to
Overall, I did well changing in account of what I wanted to see different, even if meant changing the whole piece itself. I expressed my voice and a relationship to language. Some challenges I faced during this process came differently from each original draft. A Raisin in the Sun essay was correcting my grammatical structure: run on sentence, fragments, and pausing more with periods, shortening introductions, and making sure quotes flowed well with the sentences. In the “Girl” story it was trying to develop characters further such as the head coach ‘berserkness’ and developing a best player parent coach relationship with the best player contrasting the head coach frequently. In Holden’s Voice it was a little difficult adjusting to embrace the sound and personality of Holden as well as being more sympathetic and less personal to good Old Shady. The real challenge was trying to change what I thought were masterpieces already, but it was a skill that I needed to develop and practice to benefit my writing technique. The improvements affected the various pieces with building up more and allowing a window into for other ideas to grow from there in the “Girl”