A Eulogy For Someone
April,
Thank you for sharing your story. I’ll admit, I was hesitant to read it because I hate thinking about funerals. However, I wanted to give you some feedback, so here I am.
1. To make it seem more realistic, I would add dialogue. This ties into your question #3. I don’t think that all stories need tons of dialogue, but to me, it feels like I’m getting a lot of backstory before I ever see anything from the character’s point of view. Maybe add past of someone’s eulogy? I’ve been to one funeral for a young person, and I’ve been to a few for older people. The difference I remember was the things people said. People feel like it’s important to say “they had a good life” or “they lived a long, fulfilling life” if they die old. At a young person’s
Thank you for sharing your story. I’ll admit, I was hesitant to read it because I hate thinking about funerals. However, I wanted to give you some feedback, so here I am.
1. To make it seem more realistic, I would add dialogue. This ties into your question #3. I don’t think that all stories need tons of dialogue, but to me, it feels like I’m getting a lot of backstory before I ever see anything from the character’s point of view. Maybe add past of someone’s eulogy? I’ve been to one funeral for a young person, and I’ve been to a few for older people. The difference I remember was the things people said. People feel like it’s important to say “they had a good life” or “they lived a long, fulfilling life” if they die old. At a young person’s