The changes that need to be made begins with the opening paragraph with The Dark Knight was the most popular film of 2008. There should be some supporting documentation to persuade the audience why this is true. A reliable source such as the University of Phoenix Library should have been used to search publications found in newspapers or magazines. Any information found on Wikipedia or other sites ending with .com, .org, or .net for the reliability needs further investigation. Credibility of a website is always important, especially when doing academic research or writing academic papers.
Second, the student should refrain from using contraction in any form of academic writing. Whenever you write, always think about the person or people who will read what you write. In most cases, assume that readers will know only what you write about your topic and main point. Third, the punctuation usage should be corrected so the audience would not be confused. The author used the word it’s which stands for it is, needs to be used in a possessive form its. By proofreading his essay out loud, Andy will be able to pick up on his errors with grammar and add commas before a coordinating conjunction (and, but, so, yet, for, nor) between two main clauses.
The final thought of the writer of the article needs to be summarized on what he was discussing in the previous paragraphs and his opinion why it was a good film. He should not have just suggested that the reader go see the movie since the article was not appealing.
To avoid plagiarism concerns that were raised by the faculty member the student should have used the resources that are available thru the University website. The reviewing services of Writepoint and Plagiarism Checker would have provided feedback on basic grammar and add proper citation if another writer’s material has been used. In Andy’s essay, he used the website of Wikipedia which was outlined in the course syllabus as a nonacademic source to use.... [continues]
Second, the student should refrain from using contraction in any form of academic writing. Whenever you write, always think about the person or people who will read what you write. In most cases, assume that readers will know only what you write about your topic and main point. Third, the punctuation usage should be corrected so the audience would not be confused. The author used the word it’s which stands for it is, needs to be used in a possessive form its. By proofreading his essay out loud, Andy will be able to pick up on his errors with grammar and add commas before a coordinating conjunction (and, but, so, yet, for, nor) between two main clauses.
The final thought of the writer of the article needs to be summarized on what he was discussing in the previous paragraphs and his opinion why it was a good film. He should not have just suggested that the reader go see the movie since the article was not appealing.
To avoid plagiarism concerns that were raised by the faculty member the student should have used the resources that are available thru the University website. The reviewing services of Writepoint and Plagiarism Checker would have provided feedback on basic grammar and add proper citation if another writer’s material has been used. In Andy’s essay, he used the website of Wikipedia which was outlined in the course syllabus as a nonacademic source to use.... [continues]
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