1. school Hi Lindsy, Good for you for submitting your paper early. Looks like you have some trouble with your header. Your document’s heading is not formatted correctly. In the upper left corner of the first page, the words "Running head:" should preface a shortened version of your title. The upper right corner of the page should have the numerical page number. The shortened version of your title should be in all capital letters. On subsequent pages, the shortened version of your title should appear on the lefthand side, with a page number on the right-hand side. For additional information, visit the Ashford Writing Center located in Constellation. Click on Ch 7 -Sample Paper with Formatting Instructions. [Rebecca Heckman]
Returning to School Lindsy Vickers ENG 121 Colin Murcray 10/16/2012
2 Returning to school
The beginning of my new life began with my decision to return to school. Education is very empowering aspect of someone’s life, especially mine. College is much more than just a degree. In college you also learn how to learn, perhaps one of the most important things you can get out of college. Returning to school is and will be the best decision I have made. 2
1. is very Please carefully edit your writing. Try reading it out loud. You missed a word here. [Rebecca Heckman] 2. made. You have shifted your point of view. This paper calls for an objective point-of-view and you shifted from 'me' to 'you. This is not appropriate for an academic paper. [Rebecca Heckman] 3. you You shifted from I to you. Please write in a consistent point-of-view. [Rebecca Heckman] 4. there Do you need this word? How might you reword this sentence for more clarity? EX: It was difficult for my father to raise children as a single parent. [Rebecca Heckman] 5. of. Please do not end sentences with a preposition. See the Ashford Writing Center for additional information. [Rebecca Heckman] 6. one day Use commas to set off...