The Beginning Of High School
Leon Prikhodovskiy
Professor Rhodes
English 110
16 October 2012
Author Notes
I think that my audience is generally for High school students, but also can be for eighth graders going into high school that doesn’t know what to expect. I think the purpose of my essay was to explain my experiences of my high school career and let the reader know that change is a big part in our lives. The message I think my paper is trying to get across is that as we get older not only do we change but also the things we do and the people we are around. I think the parts in my essay that helped explain my experiences were the anecdotes I used to show change over experience.
Questions:
- Are all the tenses of the words correct?
- If there is any confusion please clarify?
- Which places I could make stronger?
- If there anything you would like me to expand on?
Leon Prikhodovskiy
Professor Rhodes
English 110
16 October 2012
The Beginning of High School
It was the night before the first day of school; my two middle school friends and I were having a sleepover. We arranged our brand new clothes and were excited to get tomorrow started. We stayed up pretty late talking about different things we had seen in movies that portrayed what a students life was like in high school. We were excited for the partying, a whole new set of girls, and varsity sports. At this point we didn’t realize how much we would change. I came to the realization that people adapt, transition, and mature from year to year without realizing it. From my K-8 school and to even now college, I have found new interests, hobbies, and have even made new friends. Change is something I got used to and is what we encounter everyday in our lives.
At 7:30 AM and the bells rang, I was officially lost and late to school. I couldn't be anymore nervous; I knew maybe five percent of the school and had no idea where to go. I walked up with buddies, shook hands, and split our different ways. I thought to myself, “This is
Professor Rhodes
English 110
16 October 2012
Author Notes
I think that my audience is generally for High school students, but also can be for eighth graders going into high school that doesn’t know what to expect. I think the purpose of my essay was to explain my experiences of my high school career and let the reader know that change is a big part in our lives. The message I think my paper is trying to get across is that as we get older not only do we change but also the things we do and the people we are around. I think the parts in my essay that helped explain my experiences were the anecdotes I used to show change over experience.
Questions:
- Are all the tenses of the words correct?
- If there is any confusion please clarify?
- Which places I could make stronger?
- If there anything you would like me to expand on?
Leon Prikhodovskiy
Professor Rhodes
English 110
16 October 2012
The Beginning of High School
It was the night before the first day of school; my two middle school friends and I were having a sleepover. We arranged our brand new clothes and were excited to get tomorrow started. We stayed up pretty late talking about different things we had seen in movies that portrayed what a students life was like in high school. We were excited for the partying, a whole new set of girls, and varsity sports. At this point we didn’t realize how much we would change. I came to the realization that people adapt, transition, and mature from year to year without realizing it. From my K-8 school and to even now college, I have found new interests, hobbies, and have even made new friends. Change is something I got used to and is what we encounter everyday in our lives.
At 7:30 AM and the bells rang, I was officially lost and late to school. I couldn't be anymore nervous; I knew maybe five percent of the school and had no idea where to go. I walked up with buddies, shook hands, and split our different ways. I thought to myself, “This is