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Revising an Essay

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Revising an Essay

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Revising an Essay
UOP COM/155
12/16/12

Analyze the feedback
After reviewing my three feedback resources write point, plagiarism checker, and instructors comments I have located the necessary changes need to be made, in order to produce a college level essay. The first and foremost change that needs to be made is to develop a clear thesis statement or a preview statement. The thesis statement I have sheds some light on my topic but should let me reader know exactly what the topic is about. Secondly after reviewing the plagiarism checker I realized I have no outside sources to validate my feelings on my essays subject. I think in order to enhance my paper it would be appropriate to add a citation or a statistic. After reviewing my instructor’s comments and write point I realize my transitions and grammar are weak in some areas and I need to elaborate more on my supporting details. Granted my main concepts were well thought and spelling was up to par. If I adjust these few areas in my essay and remember to use proper grammar, I will produce a good and sound full essay.

Now that we have reviewed the feedback it is time to implement and add the necessary changes. The main focus would be to strengthen my thesis at this point. It is weak and unclear. My essay would benefit from brainstorming a stronger more direct thesis in order to enhance my introduction. The next phase would be my supporting details, by outsource for statics and credible information validating my supporting points I will make them more credible, thus creating a better impact on my reader. Finding evidence that supports my opinions will show my readers this essay is backed up and not written based of just my opinion alone. Next I would focus on my flow and coherency. I already have strong and informative information but if the reader becomes confused because my paper is choppy than...