Proposal Essay

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Overall: 83/100 B- // Cover letter 20/20 A
Grammar and Spelling: 20/25 Passive voice throughout.
Organization: 25/25 This is fine.
Content: 15/25 You need to spend more time on the proposal, making a specific suggestion and explaining how it is realistic and will be helpful. Too much of your argument is spent in establishing the causal chain leading up to global warming and not enough of it concentrates on the proposal element. MLA Format: 23/25 You’re getting closer here. Specific comments in works cited.

I recycled one of my topics, but I thought it would be a good choice for this type of essay. I feel that everyone should be conscious of what they are doing and how it affects the environment and all of the beings that live in it. As long as you build on the work, I think that’s fine. It is a good idea to ask first, though, as in some classes, the instructor will want you to do unique research for every topic.

I think I included the aspects and used the proper format for the essay. I looked at your list of aspects that should be included with this essay. Then again, it is always easier to know exactly what you meant when you wrote what someone else is reading. Oh indeed.

Any feedback or revisions that should be done are welcome. Could Slowing the Effects of Global Warming Save Our World?
Global warming has been a recurring issue in the news lately, but not everyone realizes how great the impact is on the Earth. One space between sentences The whole world's climate is changing. Climate change occurs naturally, but now people are not only causing it, they’re speeding it up. Scientists believe that our use of fossil fuels causes global warming (Musgrave). If the 6.6 billion people on the earth change a few daily habits, we may be able to slow the effects of global warming and ensure that the life of our fossil fuels is extended. As the temperature of the atmosphere rises gradually, it wreaks havoc on the glaciers, rainforests and numerous other naturally occurring habitats. The rainforests are drastically reduced in number annually due to climate shifts and people destroying them for lumber or industrial development. This destruction causes many species to become endangered due to the fact that their home has been destroyed. This destruction does not only affect the animals that live in the forests though. The rainforests supply mass quantities of oxygen into the air. Wait – big leap here. One of the main causes of the depletion of the ozone layer is the amount of carbon dioxide (CO2) that is released into the air on a daily basis. Since plants take in CO2 and give off oxygen, the more trees and plants that are destroyed, the more CO2 there will be in the atmosphere. This will ultimately result in the further depletion of the ozone layer and the effects of global warming will continue to alter the earth’s ability to sustain life. So far you’re doing a good job establishing problems with the ozone layer. But you need a transitional phrase to connect this to the coastal regions temperature rises Coastal regions will experience significant impacts due to an acceleration of sea level rise expected to average almost two feet on all U.S. coasts by 2100, according to the federal Environmental Protection Agency (Marshall). This is due to increased temperatures that are melting the glaciers. The glaciers in Glacier National Park once numbered 150. The gradual rise in temperature means that the glaciers rapidly melting and number fewer than 27 today (cite). Some scientists estimate that much of the Arctic will be ice-free in summer by the year 2100 . With daily temperatures rising slightly each year, we are experiencing longer, hotter summers and shorter, warmer winters. The projected temperature change is between 2.5 and 10 degrees by 2100, according to the latest report of the International Panel on Climate Change (IPCC). At this point, you should be discussing your proposal. You’ve already...
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