Personal Responsibility

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My comments are bracketed [ ] within the text. Some comments are in black, some in blue, so be alert. An [x] suggests that you delete the word or mark of punctuation that it follows. Please reread your corrected essay carefully and let me know if you require further explanation or discussion. I’m here to help. Thomas Uskali Written Assignment Grading Form for Personal Responsibility Essay Statement, Due Week Five Content and Development 6 Points| Points Earned5.2/6| | Additional Comments:|

All key elements of the assignment described below are covered in a substantive way.| | Write a 1,050- to 1,100-word paper expanding your Personal Responsibility Essay by incorporating feedback from your facilitator and teammates, and including the following: An introductionProperly cited and referenced research from library sources A plan to incorporate effective strategies for success as a studentA conclusionReference page * Format your essay consistent with APA guidelines.| Good, but you’re letting anecdotes and sidetrips pull you away from the main point. But your writing voice is compelling and effective. | Major points are stated clearly; are supported by specific details, examples, or analysis; and are organized logically. | | Readability and Style 2 Points| Points Earned1.6/2|

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[APA formatting and reference page models are available in the Tutorials & Guides section of the Center for Writing Excellence.] University of Phoenix| Personal Responsibility|
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It seems today people taking personal responsibility for their education is a thing of the past. Few are truly seeking what can be considered a true and properly earned education desiring only to obtain a fancy piece of paper with their name on it from an Ivy League school without doing the hard work that it entails. Shortcuts are the norm. When someone gets caught for cheating[,] the answer is always I didn’t know that was wrong. [always, “I didn’t know that was wrong.”—this is the same comment made on your previous version] A drop out claims the instructor wasn’t a good teacher. Consequently[,] blame is assessed without understanding what it is to be personally responsible. The term personal responsibility entails far more than just the meaning of those two words put together, as I have only realized after five weeks of avoiding every issue in my personal life to concentrate on pretending I was not watching pornography online but was actually reading course material and preparing research. [This sentence is confusing. Rework for clarity and conciseness. ] Dissecting the former sentence will not only yield a loaded statement into my own personal ethics and moral attitude, but will also assist in the understanding of personal responsibility and what the term being personally responsible truly means. Attempting to digest the information in the required readings, and applying it to my own educational goals, I understand the concept in a whole new light. Prior to this course if I was asked to provide a definition of the meaning of personal responsibility, I would complete a Google search of the term. After sifting through 25,000 hits and pounding my head on the laptop keyboard from frustration I would more than likely decide on using an article from the sports section from the Sunday Times as my own original idea. Fortunately having academic integrity as part of being...
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