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Running Head: NEUROLOGICAL DISORDERS [Unless a trade name, an acronym, or in the running head, do not use all capitals in academic writing]
Neurological Disorders: Effects on the Brain and Behavior
Dr. Ariel Gonzalez
University of Phoenix
July 26, 2010
Neurological disorders are disorders of the nervous system. The disorders are said to result from infections in the brain or spinal cord that lead [Check spelling--if the sentence is in the past tense, the verb conjugation is "led"] to other symptoms like confusion. Also, [Remove comma] neurological disorders result from abnormalities of the nerves. Neurological disorders lead to various symptoms like muscle weaknesses, poor coordination and [Check punctuation: insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two -- or if it begins a new clause] confusion. Neurological disorders symptoms lead to paralysis. There are ["There are" is an awkward phrase if "there" is not clearly a location] many types of neurological disorders like Alzheimer’s diseases. The neurological disorders have different causes, symptoms and [Check punctuation: insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two -- or if it begins a new clause] treatment (Hooper, 2000). Alzheimer’s is the most common type of dementia. Alzheimer disease is a brain disease that destroys memory and thinking skills as it leads to death of brain cells. Also, [Remove comma] the disease makes it difficulty to carry out single tasks. A large percentage of people in the world aged 60 have Alzheimer’s disease (Hooper, 2000). The disease can also be [Clearer writing suggestion--This is smoother as "also can be"] diagnosed [The passive voice is a form of "be" (be) and a participle (diagnosed). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Try to use the active voice most often, e.g., the student completed the paper on time. The passive voice version--The paper was completed on time by the student--See eCampus > Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] at an early age. Dementia is a brain disorder that affects a person ability to carry out various roles. Alzheimer disease involves the brain. The brain has many cells that help carry out different activities. For example, the brain helps people in thinking and remembering things. There are [Avoid using this phrase] various abnormalities that destroy the brain cells leading to death of the cells or poor functioning of the cell (Hooper, 2000). The damage to the brain begins twenty [Express numbers higher than nine in digits (when not the first word in the sentence)] years before the person develops the disease. During this time tangles begin to form deep in the brain near the entorhinal cortex. Also, [Remove comma] plaques begin to form in other areas of the brain....
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