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On the following pages are ten MELAB essays representative of each score on the MELAB Writing
Rating Scale. Commentaries follow each sample essay. A condensed version of the rating scale is available on page 22.
Essay 1

Rating: 97.................................................... 2
Commentary................................................ 3

Essay 2

Rating: 93.................................................... 4
Commentary................................................ 5

Essay 3

Rating: 87.................................................... 6
Commentary................................................ 7

Essay 4

Rating: 83.................................................... 8
Commentary................................................ 9

Essay 5

Rating: 77.................................................. 10
Commentary.............................................. 11

Essay 6

Rating: 73.................................................. 12
Commentary.............................................. 13

Essay 7

Rating: 67.................................................. 14
Commentary.............................................. 15

Essay 8

Rating: 63.................................................. 16
Commentary.............................................. 17

Essay 9

Rating: 57.................................................. 18
Commentary.............................................. 19

Essay 10 Rating: 53.................................................. 20
Commentary.............................................. 21
MELAB Writing Rating Scale...................................
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