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Hi valiamma! Got an essay on comparing two poems for coursework. Can you please help!?? I'm not happy with the part in red can you please edit it? I find it a little wordy. This is how far i've gotten so far.

With close reference to the poems, discuss the treatment of the themes of disobedience and parenting in “Little boy crying” by Mervyn Morris and “The Toys” by Coventry Patmore.             In the poems “Little boy crying” and “The Toys” by Mervyn Morris and Coventry Patmore, the themes of disobedience and parenting are closely linked and dominant throughout the text. Even though the same themes are brought up, the poets take a different approach to them by giving the parents and children emotions and actions which are poles apart. Due to this contrast and varying approaches, the reader gains two separate views on these two themes.             In the two poems, the pace plays a significant role in portraying the two themes. Morris makes use of monosyllables and short sentences making the scolding sound choppy and chaotic. The phrase, “quick slap struck” indicates the disobedience of the child due to the severe and painful punishment he has been forced to endure. The monosyllables make the words sound short and detached, increasing the pace and showing the quickness of the hit. Moreover, the word “struck” implies the strong impact of the hit, used to punish the defiant child. In addition, the pace plays a part in conveying the feelings felt by the parent. The frequent use of commas and full stops make the poem very rigid and implies the firm, forced and hurtful restriction the parent is instilling on himself in order to teach the child a valuable lesson without giving in to the tears. In contrast, only four long and extended sentences are used by Patmore in “The Toys” which decrease the pace and a sense of sorrow is felt for the dead mother. The extensive sentences suggest the continuous thoughts of guilt and sorrow which are profusely flowing into the guilty...
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