Homeless in Amercia

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Homeless in America

Should [Make sure paragraph indentation is five to seven spaces or one tab stop] The Government Have Programs in Place for the Homeless in America?

Many people call or write the National Coalition for the Homeless to ask about the number of homeless people in the United States. There is no easy answer to this question and, [Remove comma (unless it introduces a nonrestrictive phrase)] [Remove comma after "and" (the comma goes before it if this is a series or a nonrestrictive phrase)] in fact, the question itself is misleading. In most cases, homelessness is a temporary circumstance-not a permanent condition. A more appropriate measure of the magnitude of homelessness is the number of people who experience homelessness over time, not the number of “homeless people” (NCH, 2009) [The citation for a direct quote needs the page number] .

In addition, the economy and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] high unemployment rate across the country with foreclosures add to the amount of available shelters and housing for the homeless. Also, [Remove comma (unless introducing a nonrestrictive phrase)] due to [Check word usage: This phrase is most accurate in referring to something owed ($5 due) or an arrival time (due at 6:00)--try "because" or "because of"] the recent foreclosures crisis, homelessness has been on the rise. The main reason families become homeless was finances and lack of employment (NCH, 2009).

The McKinney Act originally had fifteen [Express numbers higher than nine in digits (when not the first word in the sentence)] programs providing a spectrum of services to homeless people, including the Continuum of Care Programs: the Supportive Housing Program, the Shelter plus Care Program, and the Single Room Occupancy Program ["Single" is often used as an intensifier, but it is redundant--how is "and the single Room Occupancy Program" different from "and the Room Occupancy Program"? ] , as well as [No comma before "as well as" (which means "in addition to" and is not a conjunction the equivalent of "and")] the Emergency Shelter Grant Program. It was signed [The passive voice is a form of "be" (was) and a participle (signed). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Prefer the active voice. For example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time. See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] into law by President Ronald Reagan on July 22, 1987. The McKinney Act has stood the test of time, [Remove comma (if the preceding is not a phrase set off with commas--and the following is not an independent clause)] and provides the best first step to address the needs of the population that is, by and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] large, unknown and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] underrepresented (McKinney Act, 2009).

Regardless of the all [Writing suggestion: "All" or "all of" used as an intensifier very often can be removed with no loss of meaning] the programs in place for homelessness in United States [If "United States" is not used as an adjective or in an organizational name, place "the" before it] we [Use "we," "us," or "our" to mean yourself and coauthors, not general humanity (or yourself and the reader)] [Place comma before this word if this is the end of the introductory phrase beginning with "Regardless"] have to work together...
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