your topic sentences:
1 relying on people's own religious beliefs (modal - can) sometimes go(es) the wrong way.
some believers never doubt that their religious what … beliefs? Will do what exactly?- verb + (how does this connect to your thesis?) only goes right way because they believe only that one point of view (will do what to who?-verb – and why?-object) that their religious(what?) verb - object.
there were random killing(s)-plural noun and act(s)- plural noun of terrorism in the world by religious beliefs.
Remember your topic should be general yet specific
It will be general in that it could be a lot of things, not only ‘religious beliefs’ and it is specific in that it needs to be a specific point that you are trying to make that supports your whole essays’ main idea – thesis.
It is dangerous for people to strictly view the world from only one point of view. (Topic Sentence)
It is dangerous for people to strictly view the world from only one point of view, because it will do A, B, and C to who? -and why? (Thesis)
It is dangerous for people to strictly view the world from only one point of view, because it creates conflict and violence. (Cause + Effect – Mode of Development)
Now your first of at least two supporting details (if not more???) … first of all...
Now you try to fix the second SD.
2 all counties have different histories. people believe only their countries' histories so, some countries have debated about historic issues such as disputed islands issues in Asia.
the problem is these Asian people just believe one point of view that their histories are true histories so, they have never solved these islands issues.
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