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Art is a reflection of one's self-identity in the most unaffected manner. Because art is very personal, it has no right or wrong. The type of art that has influenced me most is music.
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Who Am I? My name is ______. My ethnic background explains a lot of who I am, and the values that I have developed. My name was chosen using a religious method that is based on astrology. My parents are both from India and moved here only a couple of years before I was born. They spoke little English, and as a result, I was taught Gujarati as a first language. I grew up with a large family because my parents, grandparents, and my uncle’s family all lived in the same house. Growing up in this environment helped mold me into the man that I have become today. My family is religious and we went to the temple every week. Even as a child I attended temple schooling where they taught us about our heritage, which in turn educated me about where I came from. However, now I am not that religious and don’t go to the temple because I believe it is becoming corrupted. My family and my parents in particular, provided me with the morals...
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