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Darrell Foster
Professor Jennie Hensarling
English 101
12 April 2013

1. Is my title and introduction enticing? The title is very intriguing and makes you want to see what history I am talking about.

2. Is my thesis effective? I think it draws you attention.

3. Have I included enough details so the reader can visualize my experience? I think I have included enough details; however I would have to write a book to explain everything perfectly.

4. Are the events presented in a logical sequence? I think so I started with the main reason for the story.

5. Have I used transitions to help the sequence of events flow smoothly? I used key event to transition which I think works.

6. Have I used dialogue (if appropriate)? I did not use any dialogue really at all.

7. Have I used a consistent point of view and verb tense? I did a good job keeping it in first person.

8. Is the point of my narrative evident? I believe it is evident when it comes up.

9. Have I ended the story satisfactorily? I think it is as good as it can be. I would need a book to finish completely

10. Have I proofread thoroughly? I did read several times and had my wife read it also.

Darrell Foster
Professor Jennie Hensarling
English 101
12 April 2013
Part of History
Joining the military was one of the best decisions I have made in my life. I was born in a small town in West Virginia. Buckhannon is a great town, however it has this mystic ability to suck one in, and trap them for life. I know generations of families who have never left this town. I dreamed of far off places, adventure, fun, and a different life all together. The main reason for this was my parents divorced when I was nine years old, and the next male influence in my life was horrible, and more like a sad lifetime abuse movie. I kept my sanity in the following nine years by staying away from my home as much as I could. I would go to school early, not to...
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