Ancient Egypt and Ancient Mesopotamia: A Compare and Contrast Essay
Ancient Egypt, known as “The Gift of the Nile,” and ancient Mesopotamia, known as the land “Between the Rivers,” were the first two civilizations developed by mankind. Not only this is a double-negative that you do not need.] These were they the first civilizations to form, andbut they were also the first river-valley civilizations using the nearby river(s) [redundant – if they are the first river valley civilizations, then aren’t they near a river?] for their benefit. Ancient Egypt was birthed around 3100 B.C., and was based in the northern part of Africa. Ancient Mesopotamia came into existence around 3000 B.C. in the region now known as Iraq. Although the ancient civilizations of Egypt and Mesopotamia were developed independently, they also exhibited similarities in their governments, religions, geographies, and economies. [Good, thesis statement is clear] Geography, Climate, and Economy
Both, ancient Egypt and ancient Mesopotamia, were considered river valley civilizations. [redundant – you already made this statement] Mesopotamia, which is currently Iraq, was nestled between the Tigris River and the Euphrates River. This is known as “The Fertile Crescent.” Egypt was founded on the banks of the Nile River in what is now the northeast part of Africa. All three of these rivers flooded annually, which deposited rich silt into the soil, and created a fertile area for agriculture. The Egyptians and the Sumerians, as the Semitic people of Mesopotamia were called, possessed an economy based primarily on agriculture. They used the rivers as a way of transportation, and were able to trade with other peoples. They both created irrigation systems to provide drinking water for human and animal consumption, and as a water source so their crops could flourish. The Nile flooded each year predictably, and was a very [very is a sentence filler] stable source of water. This allowed the Egyptians to be a very prosperous civilization, rich in economy, and possessing a surplus of food. The Tigris and the Euphrates were not as predictable and were very unstable rivers. This led to major catastrophes, higher poverty levels than Egypt, and shortages of food at times. from time to time. The Sumerians had to construct complex irrigation systems to try to lessen the climate effects, whereas the Egyptians didn’t [no contractions in academic essays] need massive government assistance, and only needed to use a more basic irrigation system. [There is a lot of non-common knowledge here, but no citations and references. Common knowledge means everyone knows what happened on 9/11, but few people know all of this detail on the Egyptians and the Sumerians. Where did you learn about these two groups? You need references and citations, or else the paper is plagiarized even if you are paraphrasing here. Religion and Government [nice job with the subheads]
The Sumerians and the Egyptians were polytheists, meaning they worshipped numerous gods and goddesses. Both civilizations built temples and important monuments for worshiping their gods. The Sumerians built their temples, which were the most prominent buildings in the city-states (small cities within Mesopotamia), upon platforms named ziggurats. Egyptians also built temples for worship, but were best known for the grand pyramids that were built as the final resting place for their Pharaohs. Egyptians were ruled by dynasties of divine kingship, or better known as pharaohs, who passed down power from father to son. [passive voice] The city-states of Mesopotamia were ruled by powerful and power-hungry kings Powerful and power-hungry kings ruled the city-states of Mesopotamia. Each city-state had their own king, and were always at war with one another for control of land and water. Egypt was unified under one pharaoh, and were safe from...