The feedback that I received from WritePoint was helpful. There were three different suggestions that were provided. The first was in reference to the “passive voice using verb be” pertaining to the word combined in my paragraph. I was unfamiliar with what was stated; therefore, I researched what it meant. A passive voice is the subject of the sentence that is neither a do-er or be-er and is acted upon by some unknown initiator. (e.g.) The president approved the new policy. (active voice) The policy was approved by the president. (passive voice) With that insight, I did attempt to make a change from passive to an active voice. My attempt was not successful. In my research, passive voice in writing is not frowned upon in grammar, it will just excite the writing a little. The second issue was still dealing with the same word, combined. I used after the word combined the word together, which indicated redundancy. Therefore, I removed that word. The third response was... [continues]
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