NAME: Jonie Michaels .
SUBMIT ON WEDNESDAY STAGE 1: PREWRITING
FREEWRITE OR BRAINSTORM
1. Freewrite or brainstorm about your topic. Use sense words. * Don’t worry about grammar, logic, complete sentences, or grades.
*NOTE: Since you are expanding your Cause and Effect Paragraph, you may want to use your actual paragraph as your freewrite. DO NOT REWRITE IT IF YOU CHOOSE THIS OPTION. Simply leave me a note. For example, “I used my paragraph.”
Being Diagnosed with Diabetes
Being diagnosed with diabetes had a tremendous impact on me. When the doctor told me the news, I was horrified. My first thoughts focused on losing a limb or dying young. In addition, the misery of constantly monitoring my blood sugar levels, giving myself frequent injections, and rigidly following a limited diet scared me. Once I became more informed and rational about the challenges I faced, I was angry. I could not understand why I had the bad luck of developing diabetes. I cursed my situation and wallowed in self-pity. Learning to eat healthy foods, to control my bloods sugar, and to avoid infections seemed like punishments I did not deserve. When I finally accepted my situation, I understood that the doctor’s diagnoses had been a gift of life. I woke up each day and knew that I had the tools to control my illness. I realized that the rules about monitoring my blood sugar, controlling my diet, and fighting infections were ways to protect me from pain and serious harm. Once I let go of misery, fear, and anger, I found a new gratitude for being alive.
FINDING SPECIFIC IDEAS
2. Read your freewrite, underlining all the words, phrases, and sentences of description related to your topic. List ideas here:
I will write an introduction for this paragraph and probably turn my topic sentence into a thesis statement by adding to it a bit. Then, I will use the three main points I made in this paragraph as topic sentences (or topic sentence drafts) for three new paragraphs and add information to each one. Last, I will expand my final statement into a conclusion.
SELECT ONE TOPIC
3. Once you have specific details for your topic, identify the main idea and try to add more details to your topic and remove irrelevant ideas. Write the topic and main points below:
Effects diabetes had on my life—three stages: horror, anger, acceptance.
NAME: Jonie Michaels .
SUBMIT ON WEDNESDAY
FOCUSING THE PREWRITING: CLUSTERING or LISTING
4. List everything you underlined, grouping related ideas. Also decide on a logical ORDER for presenting present your details. *
You might want to put descriptions in order using one of the following orders: *
time order (first to last)
space order (top to bottom, or left to right)
emphatic order (i.e., most important to least important or vice versa.)
Effect 1: horror
| Effect 2: anger
| Effect 3: acceptance
| * Losing a limb * Dying young * Single parent * Worried about kids * Monitoring blood sugar levels * Injections * Rigid diet * Just 32-years-old
| * Bad luck * Wasn’t eating well * Broke * Ate cheap, quick food * Wallowed in self-pity * Guilt for putting kids at risk from bad food * Felt like punishment
| * Finally realized that diagnosis was gift so I could change * Got handouts /informational brochures * Had tools now * Rules were for protection * The ball was in my court now
IDENTIFY THE DOMINANT IMPRESSION
After you’re surveyed the list, write a sentence about the dominant impression of the details.
*NOTE: Many writers may want to expand their paragraph’s topic sentence into a thesis statement.
Being diagnosed with diabetes had a tremendous impact on me, leading me through three stages: horror, anger, and finally acceptance...
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