Allen Pinkerton Biography

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Biography of Allan Pinkerton







    Born in 1819 in Scotland, Allan Pinkerton was an activist in the chartist movement very early on. [Although this is commonly used in speech, academic writing prefers simply "early"]   As a young man Pinkerton immigrated to the United States because of the disillusion by “failure to win universal suffrage.”   [Move the period to follow the citation] (www.spartracus.schoolnet.co.uk/USApinkerton.html )   Pinkerton became a resident of Chicago where he was a deputy sheriff.   The first detective agency in the United States was founded by Pinkerton in 1852.   In the year 1861 [Writing suggestion--1861 could not be anything but a year, so "the year" or "the year of" is superfluous] , he was given a job guarding the soon to be President Abraham Lincoln.   En route to his inauguration, Pinkerton plotted to assassinate Lincoln.   Over the years this agency became a great   [Writing suggestion: "great" is an overworked word, too frequently seen, and too vague. It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Use a more specific adjective] success.
    In the year 1855 [Writing suggestion--1855 could not be anything but a year, so "the year" or "the year of" is superfluous]   Pinkerton was asked to develop a railroad police agency.   Along with his work for the police he also did work for the federal government investigating against robbery and counterfeiting.   In 1858 the Pinkerton Protective Patrol group was formed.   This was a small group of uniformed night watchmen, and contracted... [continues]

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