Assessment 1: Evaluation of Report
(Adolescents’ attitudes towards mental illness; Relationship between components and sex differences)
Q1 Read Burton page 87/89 and evaluate the introductory paragraph of the article. How does the opening paragraph in Norman and Malla (1983) differ from the guidelines illustrated in Burton? There are distinct differences within the Norman and Malla article with regard to both structure and detail when compared to the guideline illustrated in Burton. According to APA format, the introduction should contain a general overview of the topic being researched. In the Norman and Malla article, the Introduction begins with stating part of the hypothesis, not with a general overview of the topic. Burton states the hypothesis be placed in the final section of the Introduction and also that it should not be numbered. The Norman and Malla article neglects to fulfil either of these requirements. The Introductory paragraph also touches on the research methods (data and participants in the study).
The introduction is an important way of introducing a topic, grabbing people’s attention and clarifying why the study is being completed in the first place. By starting with the hypothesis, Norman and Malla have made it difficult to clarify their reasons for the study and have also missed the opportunity to include the definitions for some key terms used throughout the study. Q2 Do you think the Introduction provides a clear and critical literature review that covers relevant research, which leads logically to the hypotheses being proposed? Justify your answer with two key points I do not believe the Norman and Malla article presented a clear or critical literature review. The article is inconcise and confusing, it lacks organisation and a logical connection to the hypothesis. •The Introductory paragraphs in the article don’t follow the standard APA guidelines, outlined in Burton, which prevent the reader from following the reasons and expectations for the experiment. This makes is difficult for the reader to completely understand exactly what Norman and Malla expect to achieve out of their research and how it will contribute to what is already known. •While Norman and Malla have researched some information supporting the reasons behind the completion of their research, there is also some irrelevant information within the article. This irrelevant information weakens the report and makes it less concise than it should be. There are also long quotes which also take away from the conciseness of the information. Q3 Have the authors stated their hypotheses clearly? Make one specific suggestion for improving this part of the article. I don’t believe that the authors have stated their hypothesis clearly. Because the introductory paragraphs don’t follow a logical progression from the general information, through the critical literature review and into the hypothesis it is difficult to clearly understand what is being hypothesised and what the authors expect the article to establish. I would suggest
•Rewriting the hypothesis using correct APA format.
•Moving the hypothesis to the final section of the introduction. The first paragraph should not contain the hypothesis according to Burton. By having the hypothesis at the end of the introduction, it would draw together this part of the article, and make it flow a little better into the subsequent sections of the report. •The hypothesis would also be more concise if information was drawn a little more from the preceding information in the article. •According to Burton, the hypothesis should be in past tense and not be numbered. This part of the article would also be improved by incorporating this. Q4 Does the procedure provide enough information for the study to be replicated by someone who reads the work? If not, what additions do you suggest? Do you think any unnecessary information is included in the Method section?...